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References

Please use high quality references per WP:MEDRS such as review articles or major textbooks. Note that review articles are NOT the same as peer reviewed articles. A good place to find medical sources is TRIP database Thanks.

Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 21:54, 5 June 2014 (UTC)

Also please read WP:MEDMOS and try to use simpler English. Best Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 21:56, 5 June 2014 (UTC)

This page helps to explain how to format references WP:MEDHOW Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 21:57, 5 June 2014 (UTC)

Please use the WP:Cite templates. They improve consistency. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 17:14, 1 July 2014 (UTC)

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Sorry you received the false vandalism warning. I've reported it as an error on your behalf.

Cheers, Adrian J. Hunter^{(talk•contribs)} 13:25, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

I take it you refuse to use the cite templates. Wondering why? Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 22:59, 3 July 2014 (UTC)

Copy and paste

This content "There are several molecular formats that have proven useful for the confirmation of dengue virus in patient samples. Nucleic acid amplification tests (NAAT) are based on a nested PCR, which detects a highly conserved region of the virus, followed by a serotype-specific PCR assay. Real-time PCR has an advantage due to its rapid turnaround time. Real-time PCR has been described to possess 80–90% sensitivity; >95% specificity. Reverse transcriptase PCR and nucleic-acid sequence based amplification (NASBA) assays are also available. Negative results from a molecular test should be followed up with serological tests." was copied and pasted from [1]. I am going to block this account until their is some replies to the concerns raised. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 23:03, 3 July 2014 (UTC)

July 2014

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is this (from primary source, not a review article, but an original article) an appropriate example?

Mycoplasma pneumoniae (MP), the smallest self-replicating biological system, is a common cause of upper and lower respiratory tract infections, leading to a wide range of pulmonary and extra-pulmonary manifestations. MP pneumonia has been reported in 10 to 40% of cases of community-acquired pneumonia and shows an even higher proportion during epidemics. MP infection is endemic in larger communities of the world with cyclic epidemics every 3 to 7 years.

Rewriting/paraphrasing

M.p. is considered the smallest living organism capable of self multiplication and its medical relevance is due to its ability to cause infections in the respiratory, upper and lower, tract and in other sites of the body. During inter epidemics, Mycoplasma is responsible for one third (10-40%)of the pneumonia cases observed in the community. Epidemics occur every 3-7 years.

Can you use the cite templates?

Also can you summarize this more? What key point do you want to get across? For example"Mycoplasm pneumoniae is the cause of 10% to 40% of pneumonia acquired outside of hospital." Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 15:08, 4 July 2014 (UTC)

Dear I am understanding that you are kindly guiding me in writing an acceptable paragraph and properly including the references. My sincere thanks.

here is another attempt. I keep Mycoplasma and I included 2 references one from a book and one from a journal using the Cite templates.

Attempt

original text (From P Murray)

Mycoplasma pneumoniae. Labile organism due to absence of cell wall; extremely sensitive to drying and temperature extremes, Lower respiratory tract specimens must be processed promptly; other specimens are collected with swabs and transported in 2SP or Stuart's medium

My rewriting M.p. is very sensitive to environmental factors due to lack of a cell wall. Therefore clinical specimens should be examined promptly and must be sent to the lab in a transport medium (either 2SP or Stuart's).

Good formatting of the references using cite templates.

We also must realize that we are writing for the general public. Thus further simplifying such as "Mycoplasma pneumoniae is sensitive to environmental factors because it does not have a cell wall. Thus when testing for this bacteria samples must be collected in a special medium and examination started quickly."

Will give you another chance. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 04:41, 7 July 2014 (UTC)

dear to be on the safe side, I will do - in the coming days - two more tests using the cite templates and summarizing selected paragraphs for your review cheers g

Some additional home work for your feedback

original text (from Wikipedia) I choosed this one because as you see there are many superficial info, errors and misleading information.

M. pneumoniae is known to cause a host of symptoms such as primary atypical pneumonia, tracheobronchitis, and upper respiratory tract disease. Primary atypical pneumonia is one of the most severe types of manifestation, with tracheobronchitis being the most common symptom and another 15% of cases, usually adults, remain asymptomatic.[2][13] Symptomatic infections tend to develop over a period of several days and manifestation of pneumonia can be confused with a number of other bacterial pathogens and conditions that cause pneumonia. Tracheobronchitis is most common in children due to a reduced immune system capacity, and up to 18% of infected children require hospitalization.[2] Common mild symptoms include sore throat, wheezing and coughing, fever, headache, coryza, myalgia and feelings of unease, in which symptom intensity and duration can be limited by early treatment with antibiotics. Rarely, M. pneumoniae pneumonia results in death due to lesions and ulceration of the epithelial lining, pulmonary edema, and bronchiolitis obliterans. Extrapulmonary symptoms such as autoimmune responses, central nervous system complications, and dermatological disorders have been associated with M. pneumoniae infections in up to 25% of cases.

My version (not shortening but rewriting)

M.p. is involved in several infections of the respiratory tract, both upper (pharyngitis and otitis) and lower (primary atypical pneumonia (PAP), tracheobronchitis), with PAP being one of the more severe manifestations representing up to 40% of community acquired pneumonia.Incubation can last for two-three weeks and a significant percentage (15%) of infected adults have no symptoms. Symptoms include those linked to respiratory tract involvement and those due to extrapulmonary disease. Common mild symptoms include fever, headache, coryza, myalgia, sore throat, wheezing and coughing. Among respiratory symptoms, cough is persistent and usually dry. Extra respiratory diseases, taking place in 5-10% of cases, associated with M.p. infection include lysis of red blood cells, skin rash, joint pain and swelling, and symptoms suggestive of gastrointestinal tract, central nervous system, and heart involvement. The role played by the deranged immunity or by the infection itself in these scenarios is not yet clear.

thanks again for your patience

Terms like "Extra respiratory diseases" is not really understandable. You want to say "symptoms that occur outside of the lungs" Doc James (talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 04:04, 9 July 2014 (UTC)