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Peter Jennings

Been working on this one for a while. I'm almost done with the complete rewrite (still need to flesh out the run-up to the Iraq War/2004 election coverage). I hope to submit this to WP:FAC sometime in the near future. What needs to be done before then? Many thanks in advance for your reviews! Gzkn 08:53, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I've cross listed this at Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review. For those reviewers, would you mind giving a reassessment of the article? Does it meet A-class? Many thanks. Gzkn 09:12, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

M3tal H3ad

Could you add an infobox? Template:Infobox Biography
It's about a person so could use Wikipedia:Persondata
I think some image captions are too long and not concise
I have to pay to see the full text in citation 1 (not sure if it's allowed)

Generally well-referenced and written, goodluck with the FAC. M3tal H3ad 09:36, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments! I actually took the infobox out because it was rather ugly and redundant...I don't really think that particular template adds anything of value to articles. ::shrugs:: I'll add the Persondata and trim some of the captions. Linking to paid full texts is certainly allowed...it doesn't mean the citation is without merit. In any case, linking to an online version of articles is just a convenience to readers. If I had used the print editions of all these articles without any links, they would still satisfy WP:V. Thanks again! Gzkn 13:49, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou

It is A-Class, but typically I cannot rate it as such, because it has not gone at least through GAC; but probably it will be soon FA, so why do you care about A-Class?! This is my review:

"Peter Charles Archibald Ewart Jennings, CM". Is CM an honorary title in Canada, constituting part of his name such as "Sir" in England?
Your link to bureau links to a disamb. Is that really what you want? Appomattox is also a dis.
When I clicked on the link of reference 14, I got the right site probable, but telling me that the "page I requested could not be found". The same with note 45. What is going on there? Is it per pay maybe?
I see all your sources are online magazine or newspaper articles. This is probably OK for FAC, but I would prefer also the use of some books (you have some of them as "further reading"). You know what is the (slight and probably not so important to succeed in FAC) difference: Books often have a writer whos signs; some newspaper or magazine articles (like the one in note 16) don't.
"His insistence on covering the major international stories himself irked some of his fellow ABC foreign correspondents". Do we know who were they?
"Jennings' on-air success continued in 1990, and World News Tonight consistently led the ratings race. In January, he anchored the first installment of Peter Jennings Reporting – hour-long, prime-time ABC News specials dedicated to exploring a single topic. His inaugural program on gun violence in America drew praise.[28] His second installment of Peter Jennings Reporting in April, "From the Killing Fields", focused on US policy towards Cambodia." I have the impression the prose is getting a bit choppy here.
"this time for hosting a forum for Middle East experts that included his old girlfriend, Hanan Ashrawi". Is it "girlfriend" here the right word? Maybe "old companion" is more official-encyclopedic? Anyway, I'm not sure since I am not a native English speaker.
I don't know if the fact that 5 of the 6 photos are fair-use tagged could cause any problems in FAC.

I tried to find other flaws (although not even most of the above remarks have to do with flaws!) reading the article line by line, but I just couldn't!--Yannismarou 17:05, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I think it's equivalent to Sir, but I'm not Canadian, so I'll ask one to find out!
I'll fix the disambig links...looks like I'll have to start an article on news bureau!
Haha, that's because I gave the wrong link to LexisNexis for almost all of those articles...I typed "universal" instead of "universe". >:-( Thanks for catching that! However, I'm wondering if I even need to give out the link...it's not as if most readers have LexisNexis subscriptions anyway...hmmm...I'll think about this one.
Yeah, unfortunately I didn't have access to any of the books while writing the article since I'm overseas at the moment. :-( However, I don't think any of them feature anything major that wouldn't be covered by newspapers/magazines (I've read a few of them in the past). None of them are actually biographies on Jennings (and as far as I know, one doesn't exist). However, I really wish I had access to those books!
Unfortunately, nope (and I doubt they'd go on the record now! :-)
Yeah, parts of the prose kind of resort to the dreaded "in this year, he did this...in that year, he did that..." A product of uninspired writing :-/ I still need to do some more revising. I'm planning on trying to get some of my friends in the league of copy-editors to look over the article, too.
Me neither. I'll ask a fair use expert to comment on them. I've been trying to find free photos on the web, but all of those I've contacted haven't responded. :-(
Thanks for your insightful comments! Gzkn 00:49, 19 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Automated

Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 21:30, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks Andy! Gzkn 00:49, 19 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]