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Aladdin (film)

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Based on The Lion King's article, I've made some edits in a period of 5 days in order to turn Aladdin into a GA[1]- and it passed. Now, I need to know what's needed in order to improve it to an FA (despite turning the "Characters and voices" prose instead of a table, I'll take care of this later) igordebraga ≠ 23:54, 7 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I uploaded a picture of the DVD and video covers. The article should also be moved to Aladdin (film) because there are no other Aladdin films are on Wikipedia, and the page currently redirects to Aladdin (1992 film) anyway. Aladdin is my favourite children's movie. --thedemonhog talk contributions 03:31, 8 April 2007 (UTC) --   done.'[reply]
Comments A couple of preliminary comments (I haven't taken the time to read the whole thing yet, but I will) review WP:DASH, I fixed one dash as an example. Also refs go after punctuation per WP:CITE, I fixed a ref as an example also. Quadzilla99 22:04, 13 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Very nice work, a couple of minor comments.
  • This: "Voice actors included Robin Williams as the Genie. Although this was not the first time in which a major actor provided voice-over work for an animated film, it was the first major American animated feature film in which particular attention was paid to a celebrity cast member, such as a major movie star, in the film as part of its promotion. This has led to a subsequent increased attention to the casts of later productions, such as Toy Story and Shrek, as a major element of animated film marketing." Could use a cite. -- still searching for the cite
  • Why are these things in quotes?:"The film begins with a merchant in the mystical city of Agrabah, telling the story of a magical lamp and how it changed a young man's life ("Arabian Nights")." and "Meanwhile, the street urchin Aladdin is fleeing guards with his pet monkey, Abu, after stealing a loaf of bread ("One Jump Ahead")." It should be linked if it's something the reader needs to know and is the subject of a wiki article, also if it's a book or movie title it should be in italics. I'm confused. Quadzilla99 05:54, 19 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oh I see they are song titles, I'm not sure if that's the right way to format that. Quadzilla99 05:55, 19 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  done.
  • Refs should go after punctuation per WP:CITE, I fixed a couple, probably be a good idea to check them all. --   done.
  • "This late release, coupled with Disney's purchase and re-editing of the film through Miramax, has sometimes resulted in it being ironically labeled a "copy" of Aladdin." This could use re-wording, "...Miramax, has sometimes resulted in it being ironically labeled a "copy" of Aladdin." is a little choppy. Quadzilla99 06:12, 19 April 2007 (UTC) -- (I think)   done.[reply]
  • "Aladdin was followed by Disney's first direct-to-video sequel, The Return of Jafar in 1994. The sequel was followed by the animated television series Aladdin, that run from 1994 to 1996. Also in 1996, the Aladdin story was concluded with another direct-to-video film, Aladdin and the King of Thieves." —Might be helpful to mention which (if any) cast members were in the sequels. --   done.
Okay that's what I found. Also, I gave a little copyediting, but it still needs a little more. Good luck! Quadzilla99 06:12, 19 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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