I've listed this article for peer review under multiple wikiprojects because I'd like to get some creative feedback to take this article to GA status. Thanks,

Arman (Talk) 05:01, 4 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Automated review

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The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, which some editors find useful and others do not. Be aware that not all automatically generated comments may be applicable.

  • Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]  Done
  • Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.[?]  Done
  • Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 12 Meter, use 12 Meter, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 12 Meter.[?]  Done
  • Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006.[?]  Done
  • There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view.
    • apparently
    • might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, or are not weasel terms, please strike this comment).[?]   Done
  • Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: meter (A) (British: metre), metre (B) (American: meter), realise (B) (American: realize), isation (B) (American: ization), signalling (B) (American: signaling), program (A) (British: programme), skeptic (A) (British: sceptic).  Done
  • Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
    • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”  Done
  • Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 08:44, 4 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The suggestions from the automated review have been incorporated in the article now. Arman (Talk) 10:32, 5 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]