Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of The Afsluitdijk

Battle of The Afsluitdijk

This is about a little known battle in WWII in which the Germans suffered one of their rare defeats in the opening stages of the war. I did probably 95% of it myself so I am curious to see what is thought of this article about a little known battle. (Red4tribe (talk) 22:39, 23 April 2008 (UTC))[reply]

Gaia Octavia Agrippa

Looks good for a minor battle and is in depth. A few comments though:

Inline citations please
The references and notes section should be one with all references shown will help of a {{reflist}}
Many more internal links needed
Any external links would be helpful
Make the number of people/planes in the main text words instead of numbers to give a more professional feel.

If it wasn't for not having enough citations this would be a very stable B-class article. Gaia Octavia Agrippa^Talk | _Sign 17:48, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ryan4314

In regards to the first sentence of the lead; un-bold the "The" at the very start, move the Afsluitdijk link out of the "Battle of the Afsluitdijk" to the "control of the Afsluitdijk dike" later on (we're meant to avoid bold wikilinks), you'll wanna change the "[[May 1940]]" to look like this "[[May]] [[1940]]" (although personally I'd not link it all, you only need to link if you have the exact day as well) and also mention it was part of WW2 as well (I know 1940 makes it pretty clear, but some people are thick and don't know the dates of WW2).

"The Battle of the Afsluitdijk was an attempt by the German Army to seize control of the Afsluitdijk dike in May 1940. (Say they lost before this sentence) If the Germans had successfully taken the dike, it is very likely that they could have taken North Holland from its north. The amount of ("Northern-Holland from the North and the amount of)" civilian casualties could have been devastating. The Dutch troops were lead by Captain Boers and the Germans by General Feldt. (This looks a bit odd here maybe merge/shuffle it around)"

Basically the lead is meant to be a summary for anybody who accidentally stumbles across this page (i.e. the "random page" feature), as you edit it, try to imagine you're one of these people. Also it couldn't hurt to beef it up a little. Ryan4314 (talk) 19:22, 1 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]