Draft talk:David J. Maloney

good start - some suggestions to improve

For a draft aritcle, this one is in better shape than most. Great start.

Here are a few suggestions--

* keep the opening lead section short - it should be a summary of the body

* as such, I would move down the meat of it.

* add new sections such as Early life and education, Early career, Notable activities, and Controversies. You’ll find many other biographies of living people articles are divided into similar sections.

References look great. Lmk if you need any help, I’d be glad to lend a hand. SilverhairedHarry (talk) 18:31, 24 September 2024 (UTC)

Is there someone actively trying to publish this article? I made more changes today. I added more headings to better match other BLP articles. Cleaned up and copyedited. Stuff like that. SilverhairedHarry (talk) 20:53, 6 November 2024 (UTC)