Draft talk:Philip Rylands

Autumn 2024 Educational Project Page

This page is part of an Educational Project by students of LIUC, Italy, with a course page at: [1]https://outreachdashboard.wmflabs.org/courses/LIUC_-_Universit%C3%A0_Cattaneo/Digital_Technology_(October_-_December,_2024) . The users of the group are new to the Wikipedia platform, have completed mandatory Training for Students, and are learning to edit following Wikipedia rules. They are open to any advice on improvements of the page in conformity to Wikipedia requirements and guidelines, and any help useful for the enhancement of the page will be gladly accepted. The student Usernames are:

• Ludusludii
• CuraLiuc5
• LIUCDigitalMaster33
• DodoneAms
• Gianky Gio
• Burghermaker

Issues or questions can be referred direct to the users or to their tutor @Limelightangel Limelightangel (talk) 14:02, 28 October 2024 (UTC)

Feedback on draft 1/11/24

@Ludusludii, CuraLiuc5, LIUCDigitalMaster33, DodoneAms, Gianky Gio, and Burghermaker:

• note the guidelines and good practice on lead (introductory) section and look at good practice other pages. See: Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section. Use this to develop this section. See also Wikipedia:Writing_better_articles#Lead_section.
• Style: Note the guidelines on style, including bias, subjectivity, sources, e.g. 'vast audience';'to significantly influence';'to have great success', etc. See: Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Vocabulary
• note, understand and avoid overlinking e.g. enthusiasts, London, exhibitions, etc. See Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Linking
• note the addition of ref. 3, which has been reused using the 'named reference' tool in the toolbox menu to create a refname tag to permit reuse of the same source with only 1 final reference for it. See: Help:Referencing_for_beginners

Limelightangel (talk) 15:59, 1 November 2024 (UTC)

New sections

I recently added a sub-section called "education" in the section "personal life". I'm planning to add a section about Rylands' career. If you have some ideas feel free to share them. LIUCDigitalMaster33 (talk) 13:25, 2 November 2024 (UTC)