Talk:.hack//G.U./GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 18:54, 27 July 2020 (UTC)

I'll take on this review. If I'm not back by this time next week, ping me. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:54, 27 July 2020 (UTC)

Thanks ProtoDrake. No rush, but please do ping me on this review as I am a co-nominator and Tintor is having net issues. Axem Titanium (talk) 01:39, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

@Axem Titanium and Tintor2: I've looked through this article. As it stands at the moment, it's fairly close to a pass. It's well researched, comprehensive without being bloated, and stays on topic. There are some points that stood out to me.

• Image description of cover art box doesn't match up with categories, and there's no source.
  • Replaced
• Is there a better source for the cast image than TV Tropes? Is that actually where it's from, or was it cooped from somewhere else by them as an illustration?
  • Replaced image. For some reason, the original image was removed.
• In the lead, the term "game within a game" is only used once, and there doesn't appear to be any overt commentary on the usage of this phrase, let alone another place where it's used in quotes.
  • Done.
• In "Gameplay", there should be a mention of the game's true genre as well as its fictional genre.
  • Done. Action RPG
• In "Gameplay", the last sentence of the second paragraph is uncited.
  • Done
    • @Axem Titanium: Is BagoGames a reliable, citable source in this instance? --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:57, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
      • I replaced it with another ref on the VGRS list. Axem Titanium (talk) 20:36, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
• In Reception, the term "translation script" should I think either be "translation" or "translated script".
  • Done

The following are more suggestions.

• Put JP text parts into footnotes, as they can clutter the prose for some readers.
  • Done
• Archive as many sources as seems fit, as things like dev blob posts have an unhealthy habit of becoming inaccessible.
  • Archived. I still I don't know if I fixed the stuff well. Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 17:38, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

Those are the ones I noted. Putting on hold for now. --ProtoDrake (talk) 10:18, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

@Axem Titanium: Although I revised some stuff, I can't make the footnotes from the lead appropiately. I had to change the image to another group shot.Tintor2 (talk) 18:42, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

I fixed the footnotes (you missed a set of "}}" template brackets). I updated the image fair use rationales and uploaded a cleaner version of the character image. Thanks for the review, ProtoDrake! I think we covered all these points. Axem Titanium (talk) 20:36, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

@Axem Titanium and Tintor2: With the improvements, I think we can call this a Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:39, 6 August 2020 (UTC)

Thank you so much! Axem Titanium (talk) 21:46, 6 August 2020 (UTC)