Talk:12 Years a Slave (film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 1ST7 (talk · contribs) 23:41, 24 November 2013 (UTC)

I'll review this nomination. Initial comments will hopefully be posted soon. --1ST7 (talk) 23:41, 24 November 2013 (UTC)

I did some minor copyediting; I hope you don't mind. Here's the review:

1. Well-written
   • The word "universal" (or "universally") is used twice in the lead to describe the film's acclaim. While I don't doubt that it was very well-received by critics, I'd suggest that a less all-inclusive term be used for accuracy's sake. For example, you can say "Ejiofor was widely praised for his work". The opening sentence of the "Critical response" section should be altered likewise.

 Done--Aichik (talk) 04:18, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

1. • The second sentence in the second paragraph of the lead is a bit of a run-on. It should probably be split into two sentences.  Done I compromised, because I don't agree it needs to be split in two: It's well-known among filmgoers that Chiwitel played him and that he's up for all of these awards. But I replaced the semi-colon with an and.--Aichik (talk) 04:18, 1 December 2013 (UTC)
   • "Given the name 'Platt' to conceal his true identity as a free man..." Is "Platt" supposed to be a given name or a surname? Not done: Unclear, definitely not the previous slaveholder's name as was sometimes the practice for naming enslaved people. It could have been a mononym given that enslaved blacks were treated like animals at the time, but can't say.--Aichik (talk) 22:45, 2 December 2013 (UTC)
   • Some parts of the plot section are confusing. Please explain the part about John Tibeats a little more - his relation to Ford, and why he is able to violently abuse and nearly kill Northup despite not being his "master".  Done Cleared this up. Lots of verbal abuse and no physical until the one time when Northrup fights back. --Aichik (talk) 01:03, 2 December 2013 (UTC)
   • Is Patsey required to pick more cotton than the other slaves?

 Done No but the film leaves it deliberately ambiguous as to why she does. --Aichik (talk) 03:29, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

1. • The structure of this sentence is a little strange: "Despite his wife's (Paulson) extreme jealousy, Epps lusts for Patsey for her service and repeatedly rapes her."

 Done Fixed.--Aichik (talk) 03:29, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

1. • The style is inconsistent when naming the portrayers of the characters in the plot section. Some of the actors are credited by their full names while others are only by their surnames. Done Made more consistent and added two more actors' names.--Aichik (talk) 01:00, 2 December 2013 (UTC)
   • This sentence should probably be cut: "Notably, 34 of Metacritic's reviewers gave the film a score of 100, which (as of this writing) is more than any other film has on the site." Both the word "notably" and the relative time reference are discouraged by Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch.

 Done--Aichik (talk) 04:18, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

1. • The "Accuracy" section is a bit disjointed. Can you please make the quotes flow better?

 Done--Aichik (talk) 22:36, 2 December 2013 (UTC)

1. • "Forrest Wickman of Slate noted that..." Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch, please replace the word "noted" with another synonym for "said".  Done --Aichik (talk) 01:03, 2 December 2013 (UTC)
2. Verifiable with no original research:
   • Ref no. 3 and 64 are bare URLs. Please give the full references.

 Done--Aichik (talk) 03:29, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

1. Broad in its coverage:
   • I read through the article on the book 12 Years a Slave, and it doesn't seem to mention Patsey. Do you know if her character is historical or fictional, or if she is perhaps a composite of a few different individuals?

 Done This interview with Lupita Nyong'o reveals that Patsey was real. It's totally weird that the article on the book doesn't mention her so I'll leave a note on that Talk page when I have a minute.--Aichik (talk) 03:04, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

1. Neutral:
2. Stable:
   • No edit wars or serious content disputes.
3. Illustrated, if possible, by images:

I'll put this on hold for a week to give you time to address these things. Thanks for your work! --1ST7 (talk) 07:49, 27 November 2013 (UTC)

'Kay done. Let me know what you think.--Aichik (talk) 22:52, 2 December 2013 (UTC)

All of the changes look good; there's just one thing left. It looks like more information was added to the "Accuracy" section (fourth paragraph), but there is no citation for it. Can you please add one? --1ST7 (talk) 03:15, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

 Done Should be covered now. If not, let me know.--Aichik (talk) 16:17, 8 December 2013 (UTC)

Looks good to go now, so I'm passing it. Congratulations, and thanks for your work! --1ST7 (talk) 03:27, 10 December 2013 (UTC)