Talk:12th Light Horse Regiment (Australia)/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Anotherclown in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 03:28, 19 December 2011 (UTC)
Progression
edit- Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
- Version of the article when review was closed: [2]
Technical review
edit- Citations: The Citation Check tool reveals no errors (no action required).
- Disambiguations: no dab links [3] (no action required).
- Linkrot: external links all check out [4] (no action required).
- Alt text: Images all have alt text [5] (no action required).
- Copyright violations: The Earwig Tool is currently not working, however spot checks using Google reveal no issues [6] (no action required).
Criteria
edit- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- Prose might need to be improved here: "Upon establishment, the regiment had an authorised strength of 25 officers and 497 other ranks, who were organised into a regimental headquarters, three squadrons, each of which consisted of six troops." For instance consider instead: "Upon establishment, the regiment had an authorised strength of 25 officers and 497 other ranks, who were organised into a regimental headquarters and three squadrons, each of which consisted of six troops."
- Changed. AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- Wording here: "...but were involved in fighting off a number of sharp engagements." Could this perhaps be written better as: "...but were involved in fighting off a number of sharp attacks."
- Changed. AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- "Following this, the 12th were sent back to the rear to rest, arriving at the railhead at El Ferdan...", railhead should be wikilinked earlier in the text (at first appearance).
- Well spotted. Moved. AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- There seems to be an inconsistency in the presentation of "Machine-Gun Section", in some places you use "machine-gun section". Pls review and amend if required.
- Interesting point and one I had to think about. In this case, my take is that grammatically it is correct to use lower case where I have because of the construction "its machine-gun section" is an improper noun group as opposed to "the Machine-Gun Section" which is a proper noun group. Happy to adjust if you think its an issue, though. AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- Happy with that, I had a feeling it was something like this but wanted to check. Anotherclown (talk) 22:37, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- Interesting point and one I had to think about. In this case, my take is that grammatically it is correct to use lower case where I have because of the construction "its machine-gun section" is an improper noun group as opposed to "the Machine-Gun Section" which is a proper noun group. Happy to adjust if you think its an issue, though. AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- Is this a typo: "...result most of warm weather equipment had been left behind..."? Specifically "most of warm weather". Also should this be really read "cold weather equipment"?
- Yes, I've fixed this. I really should stop writing when I have a fever! AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- All major points cited using WP:RS.
- Consistent citation style used throughout.
- No issues with OR.
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- All major points are covered without going into undue detail.
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
- No issues here.
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- All recent edits look constructive.
- It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
- a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
- Images used are all in the public domain and seem appropriate for the article.
- Overall:
- a Pass/Fail:
- This is an excellent regimental history in my opinion, only a couple of fairly minor issues with prose listed above to be dealt with before the review is past. Happy to reconsider any points you disagree with. Cheers. Anotherclown (talk) 05:07, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- G'day, thanks for the review. I think I've responded to all your points. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- Passing now. Well done. Anotherclown (talk) 22:37, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
- G'day, thanks for the review. I think I've responded to all your points. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 20 December 2011 (UTC)