Talk:1859 Atlantic hurricane season
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Yellow Dingo in topic GA Review
1859 Atlantic hurricane season has been listed as one of the Natural sciences good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. Review: September 8, 2016. (Reviewed version). |
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Reviewer: Yellow Dingo (talk · contribs) 11:39, 5 September 2016 (UTC)
I'll take this. I should be done reviewing within a day or two. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 11:39, 5 September 2016 (UTC)
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edit- Lead
- "with at least 25 boats sinking, with several people drowning after" → it reads weird repeating "with" maybe split into two sentences: "In early October, the sixth cyclone brought damage to Inagua in the Bahamas. At least 25 boats sunk, with several people drowning after one vessel capsized.
- Hurricane 1
- (165 km/h) – equivalent → (165 km/h) which is equivalent
- Hurricane 2
- "Existed in the northwestern Atlantic in the middle of August, the only evidence of the storm was reports from two vessels in the vicinity of bad weather." → "It existed in the northwestern Atlantic in the middle of August with the only evidence of the storm being reports from two vessels in the vicinity of bad weather."
- Hurricane 3
- "winds were estimated" → "winds are estimated"
- Hurricane 4
- Partagás - in the lead you don't have the accent on the "a"; keep it consistent
- "As with the previous hurricane, no track existed for this storm until the 2000 HURDAT," - you say in H3 that the track was developed in 1995
- I think 1995 is correct. There's nothing to indicate in the sources that the track was created in 2000.--12george1 (talk) 21:17, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
- Hurricane 5
- "September 18, newspaper accounts" → "September 18, using newspaper accounts"
- "reemerged" → "re-emerged"
- "into the" → "in the"
- I think that should stay as it is. It would be like saying "I walked into the forest"--12george1 (talk) 21:17, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
- "continued toward the" → "continued towards the"
- "prior passing" → "prior to passing"
- Unlink "Mobile" in the second paragraph as you linked it the first
- "After a wharf was flooded, causing authorities to warn residents to seek higher ground." → "After a wharf was flooded, authorities warned residents to seek higher ground."
- "The trains were" → "The train system was"
- "at least $10,000" → "at least US$10,000"
- "With over" → "With the storm causing over"
- Hurricane 6
- "signalling an intense" → "signalling it was an intense"
- Tropical Storm 7
- "suffered similar a fate" → "suffered a similar fate"
- Hurricane 8
- "reported to near Bermuda" → "reported near Bermuda"
- "peak with winds" → "peak at winds"
- "into extratropical cyclone" → "into an extratropical cyclone"
- General
- In quite a few of the paragraphs you refer to "Category 1" or "Category 2" storms. Normally we spell out numbers 0-9 per MOS:SPELL09. Is there a special reason why you haven't? If not then they should be spelled out. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 07:56, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
- It should stay as "Category 1" or "Category 2". It's similar to things like Magnitude 5 earthquake or F4 tornado.--12george1 (talk) 21:17, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
Final
editNice work so far. Putting this on hold. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 07:56, 7 September 2016 (UTC)
- @Yellow Dingo: I've fixed or responded to all of the points you raised. Thanks for the review --12george1 (talk) 01:16, 8 September 2016 (UTC)
- Ok nice work; passing. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 05:39, 8 September 2016 (UTC)