Talk:1917 Nueva Gerona hurricane

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Cyclonebiskit in topic GA Review

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I'm a little confused with the title. There's only one mention of Pinar del Rio during the article, and that's mentioning some minor damage. Perhaps it should be moved to 1917 Florida Panhandle hurricane. As for improving the article, it'd be nice if there was another image. I'd like if the U.S. impact was organized better. It varies amongst four different states, and it got a little confusing when you didn't put the state's name after the city while wikilinking. ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:20, 28 February 2008 (UTC)Reply

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Reviewer: Cyclonebiskit (talk · contribs) 15:37, 12 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hey there George, I'll be reviewing this article. Comments to follow soon. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 15:37, 12 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lede
  • I went ahead and condensed the lede for you. The storm summary portion was previously about as long as the meteorological history, which really didn't make it much of a summary :P
Meteorological history
  • West-northwest motion should be mentioned
  • Upon entering the Caribbean Sea on September 21, the system intensified quicker, becoming a Category 1 hurricane on the modern day Saffir–Simpson hurricane wind scale several hours later. — "several hours later" doesn't reference a specific time to be of any use to readers. Track also shows it became a hurricane about 18-24 hours after entering the Caribbean, which is longer than just "several" hours.
  • The turn northwest after clearing Jamaica should be mentioned (this would also remove the need to mention its motion immediately after clearing Cuba in paragraph 2)
  • Shortly after becoming a major hurricane, the storm passed over Cayman Brac. This should be noted somewhere.
  • The storm skirting the northern coast of Isla de la Juventud at its peak should be mentioned
Caribbean
  • I added the info from all except The Indianapolis News, Chicago Daily Tribune, The Kingston Daily Freeman (October 10). I'm not sure what you want me to add from The Indianapolis News. For the Chicago Daily Tribune, I found that info from another source already used. The Kingston Daily Freeman (October 10) doesn't really have anything worth adding, imo.--12george1 (talk) 18:01, 18 May 2016 (UTC)Reply
United States
  • Please double-check newspapers.com for relevant information in the United States. I'm pretty sure I saw a decent amount of information for the US while I was searching for Caribbean information. Remember to vary search terms (i.e. hurricane, storm, cyclone) since reports are not always consistent.

Overall a fairly good article but needs a bit of expansion before I can pass it. I'm placing it on hold to allow you time to do so. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 17:00, 12 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Good to go now! Nice work. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 02:32, 20 May 2016 (UTC)Reply