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Latest comment: 6 months ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review

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Passed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:32, 25 January 2024 (UTC)Reply

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 09:03, 25 January 2024 (UTC)Reply

I'll have a go at this one. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:03, 25 January 2024 (UTC)Reply

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A thoroughly entertaining piece of sporting history, and a well-written and well-cited article with apposite illustrations, so my comments will be few.

  • I suppose that the variety of football (clearly not soccer) should be mentioned and linked somewhere.
  • Maybe wikilink chemical formula.
  • Governor Edwin P. Morrow: maybe say Kentucky governor since the state hasn't been mentioned yet: or maybe better, say Danville, Kentucky just above.
  • At top of 'Recent years', maybe drop first word "After" and end sentence at "World War I", starting next sentence with "The team...". The next paragraph begins with "After", for one thing.
  • "after the contest sold out[16]" -> "when the contest sold out,[16]"
  • "a former Transylvania football player": this isn't the country, so maybe say "Transylvania University" or "Transylvania Pioneers" explicitly.
  • "had not ever played" -> "had never played"
  • 'Game summary' - I guess I can see why the heading was phrased this way but it's rather a dull one. Maybe 'Game play' or something on those lines? I'd be tempted to write 'The game itself' but people don't like the definite article.
    • "Game summary" is sort of my default as it's used very commonly in present-day college football articles; my second choice would probably be something like "The game" but that doesn't get rid of the definite article issue you mentioned. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:57, 25 January 2024 (UTC)Reply
  • "impossible formula" image: suggest we say in the caption, and repeat the citation there, that the formula was painted all around Danville from soon after the game.
  • 'See also': why not move the link to the text "largest upsets in the history of college football"? Or it could be a "Further" link at the top of 'Legacy'.
    • It wouldn't fit for the "largest upsets" text since that list covers more than just historical upsets. I added it as a hatnote in "Legacy" with "See also" instead of "Further", since in my mind the latter gives the impression that there will be more reading about this game's legacy specifically instead of other games with notable legacies - also open to further suggestion here if you feel there is a better solution. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:57, 25 January 2024 (UTC)Reply

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  • All images are from Commons; all are clearly PD as labelled there, except for the recent photograph by nom which is CC-by-SA.
  • (I note in passing that [49] Danville Daily Messenger's front page would work really nicely as a thumbnail image in the article. Given its date, it must be PD. Obviously not a requirement for GA.)

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Summary

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This is a fine article and with the few small adjustments will make a worthy GA. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:40, 25 January 2024 (UTC)Reply

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