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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 19:36, 17 December 2015 (UTC)Reply


  • "At least eleven tropical cyclones developed during the season. Of these eleven tropical systems, all of them intensified into a tropical storm and eight further strengthened into hurricanes." - feels like there is a redundancy here. Try merging the sentences?
  • "with boating accidents and drownings resulting in between 55 and 58 fatalities" - in' isn't needed
  • "About 709 deaths" - too exact to be "about"
  • Why does the season summary chart include June if there were no storms then?
  • In the lead, you refer to the Havana hurricane, but in the season summary, you mention a damaging "Bermuda hurricane". These were one in the same, so find a way to mention them the same way (like "Havana-Bermuda" or something). Also, that storm desperately needs an article. @TheAustinMan:, almost done this?! It would be helpful if that sandbox was published, even if Bermuda is missing info.
  • "three of which, in a rare occurrence, were then hurricanes; three hurricanes have only twice been active at the same time in the Atlantic Ocean, on both August 22, 1893, and September 25–27, 1998." - where did this info come from? You can't claim HURDAT, as it doesn't say it directly. In addition, 1961 Atlantic hurricane season definitely did this as well, as did 2010 AHS. So unless you want to list each time by a better source, just say that there were three and be done with it.
  • "the cyclone struck the island of New Providence, the seat of the Bahamian capital Nassau, on the morning of July 26, producing wind speeds estimated at up to 135 mph (217 km/h) there. " - few problems. First, the rounding. Second, you use both "estimated" and "up to", so the stat is useless as written. I could claim my net worth is estimated at up to $1 billion, as "up to" means it is definitely lower. Use something more concrete. Also, who estimated the winds, and were the winds in Nassau or just in New Providence.
  • "The Bahamas" - don't link this so much.
  • "it was called the worst storm to affect Nassau since the 1866 Nassau hurricane, another Category 4 cyclone that struck New Providence, and caused major flooding throughout the Bahamas" - which storm caused major flooding, the 1866 or the 1926 one?
  • " in the British colony" - is the link needed? And is the mention needed either? Does the fact it was a British colony provide any additional context to the storm?
  • " In all, the hurricane caused at least 287 deaths[2]—the fourth deadliest July hurricane since 1492" - ref 2 was published in 1966. How do you know there weren't deadlier July hurricanes after that.
  • "Early on July 29, a tropical depression formed more than 1,200 mi (1,930 km) east of Antigua in the Leeward Islands. " - just a general note for the future that might make your life easier. If a storm doesn't affect Antigua or the Leeward Islands, you don't have to give a mileage for that land location, especially if the storm remains far from land. You can go for something more generic if it forms halfway between Lesser Antilles and Cape Verde (which this storm seems to have done). But it's fine for this article.
  • " becoming a tropical storm by 00 UTC on July 31" - not 00:00 UTC?
  • On what basis was H2's peak intensity estimated? A ship? Pressure? Ditto the rest of the storms, I suppose.
  • "The system produced winds up to 54 mph (87 km/h) on Bermuda" - there it is again. Don't use "up to" if the storm produced winds of 54 mph.
  • "some portholes of the Orca were damaged and 15 passengers treated for cuts, bruises, and contusions." - missing word?

More later. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:36, 17 December 2015 (UTC)Reply

  • "On August 20, a low pressure area producing unsettled weather in the western Caribbean Sea,[22] and centered about 400 mi (644 km) west-northwest of Maracaibo, Venezuela, was determined to have become a tropical depression, though originally, prior to scientific reanalysis in April 2012[10] based upon a 1975 report,[26] it was not believed to have done so until two days later." - this could definitely be clearer, especially if it was split up. I appreciate the reference to the report though.
  • "Moving west-northwest, the depression strengthened to a tropical storm the next day" - you just said "two days later", so it would be helpful to use a specific date here.
  • "As it approached Cape San Antonio at the western tip of Cuba on August 22, the cyclone then veered to the west-northwest" - so did it hit Cuba?
  • " Late on August 23, the cyclone, continuing to intensify, began curving northwestward, and by the afternoon of August 24, with winds of 100 mph (160 km/h), it turned north. " - too many commas
  • "Less than 24 hours later, the storm rapidly weakened to a moderate tropical storm and curved west-northwestward, weakening to a tropical depression on August 27 and dissipating over Texas." - ref?
  • The MH for H4 is incomplete. You don't mention its demise.
  • "By 06 UTC on September 10, a strong tropical storm with winds of 70 mph (110 km/h) developed over the open Atlantic Ocean about 1,000 mi (1,610 km) southeast of Bermuda, but likely formed earlier and remained undetected due to a lack of ship observations." - don't say it developed if it likely formed earlier. Just say "was first observed"
  • "passing about 15 mi (24.1 km) west of Nassau" - too exact
  • Don't use "apparently" in TS 6. It's too wishy washy of a term.
  • "15 mi (24.1 km) south of Downtown Miami" - see two above
  • "According to estimates in the past decade" - don't use something that will be wrong 10 years from now
  • H7 needs impact for the Gulf Coast
  • "Late that day, the cyclone swerved precipitously to the north, making landfall on the island of São Miguel near Ponta Delgada at peak intensity, becoming only the first of two confirmed hurricanes to strike the Azores since records began in 1851, the other being Hurricane Hannah in 1959, another landfalling Category 2 hurricane that struck the same island." - this is dubious citing to HURDAT. Try finding a better reference.
  • "The center passed just 10 mi (16.1 km)" - as a general rule, double check all of the units in the article for rounding.
  • "While weather forecasters knew of the storm's approach on Bermuda, it covered the thousand miles from the Bahamas to Bermuda so rapidly it apparently struck with few warning signs aside from heavy swells. On October 21, with the eye of the storm still 700 mi (1,130 km) from Bermuda, weather forecasts from the United States called for the hurricane to strike the island on the following morning with gale force. The Arabis-class sloop HMS Valerian, based at the HMD Bermuda, was returning from providing hurricane relief in the Bahamas and was overtaken by the storm shortly before she could make harbour. Unable to enter through Bermuda's reefline, she fought the storm for more than five hours before she was sunk with the loss of 85 men.[8] The British merchant ship Eastway was also sunk near Bermuda. Although the Valerian '​s commanding officer, Commander Usher, reported that there was no sign of a major storm at 08:00 UTC, when his ship was in sight of Bermuda, and when the British Army meteorologists at Prospect Camp measured the wind at 28 mph (45 km/h), by 10:00, the winds had reached 95 mph (153 km/h). When the centre of the storm passed over Bermuda at noon, the winds dropped to 8 mph (13 km/h), then increased to 114 mph (183 km/h), whereupon the Army took down its anemometer to protect it. The Royal Naval Dockyard was being hammered and never took its anemometer down. It measured 138 mph (222 km/h) at 13:00 UTC (about the same time the Valerian went down), before the wind destroyed it." - definitely some trivial information in there. Try cutting this down. It's a season article, so it doesn't need a complete summary of the storm, especially now that the storm has an article.
  • "Around 06:00 UTC on November 12," - make sure you have UTC consistency as well

All in all a good article. Shouldn't be tough to finish all of this. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:37, 19 December 2015 (UTC)Reply

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