Talk:1933 Outer Banks hurricane/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 04:25, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• No link to the season article in the lede?
  • Added. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• "It moved generally to the north-northwest and strengthened quickly to its peak winds on September 12, estimated at 140 mph (220 km/h)." - I think it would be good to avoid using "it/its" more than once in a sentence.
  • Good call. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• "It began weakening as it approached the southeastern United States," - Ditto
  • The Pokémon? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• "Hurricane force winds extended into southeastern Virginia, causing two deaths." - Did the winds caused the deaths?
  • Hmm, not sure. Reworded. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• "For over two days, the hurricane remained near peak intensity while tracking to the northwest" - I don't think this is a good way to start a new paragraph
  • Why not? The previous paragraph stated peak winds, and the next paragraph is just the next stage in its life. It's a story. A fairy tale of a hurricane gone astray. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• "around which time a pressure of 957 mbar (28.3 inHg) was recorded. The eye also passed over Diamond Shoals, where a pressure of 952 mbar (28.1 inHg) was recorded." - Is it necessary to mention both pressure readings?
  • It is, because that's how they determined that the storm did not make landfall. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• "The outer rainbands of the hurricane dropped moderate to heavy rainfall," - Wikilink to rainband
  • Easy enough. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• "In southeastern Virginia, winds reached 79 mph (128 km/h)." - According to this, the strongest winds were 88 mph at Norfolk.
  • But HURDAT suggests that winds weren't as strong as originally estimated estimated, and that sustained winds only reached 79 mph. Since it's unclear whether 88 mph was a gust, or an incorrect sustained wind report, I didn't add it. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• "In Provincetown, Massachusetts, the storm dropped 12.3 in (310 mm) of rainfall as the storm passed the region." - Fix this to avoid saying "the storm" twice.
  • Did. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• Why is reference #11 a link to a report on Hurricane Carol?
  • Gah, that's what I get for copying refs from another article. Fixed. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:31, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
• Ok, I am gonna pass this article now.--12george1 (talk) 15:33, 6 October 2013 (UTC)