Talk:1937 World Snooker Championship/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by BennyOnTheLoose in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 16:18, 14 October 2021 (UTC)Reply


Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Prose

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Lede

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  • eleventh - MOS:NUM suggests we should be consistent, and we use numbers in this sentence elsewhere. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • I feel like the bit about the participants and debutants could go in the first para, and have the second para be the results of the tournament. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • There were nine participants. Championship debutants Bill Withers and Fred Davis, the younger brother of Joe Davis, played a qualifying match in January 1937, which Withers won to progress to the main event. - how about There were nine participants at the event, with debutants Fred Davis (brother of Joe) and Bill Withers competing in a qualifying match. Withers won the match to participate with the remaining seven players. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Amended. I tweaked your proposed wording slightly, mainly because Joe Davis hasn't appeared in the text yet. (Not sure if the change hs introduced plus-ing, but I've not seen that as an issue for a GA nominee). BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:48, 25 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

General

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  • Billiards and Snooker magazine's commentary on the tournament stated that the standard of play was higher than in any of the preceding championships. Praising Joe Davis, the article suggested that "It may be doubted if any game was so completely, so perfectly interpreted as is snooker by Davis. - worth mentioning the author William Clifford? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

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