Talk:1940 Nova Scotia hurricane

GA Review

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

• "Shortly after, the hurricane recurved" one thing "shortly after" to "Shortly thereafter". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

 Done - Changed to the recommended revision. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• " and subsequently reached peak intensity the following day with maximum sustained winds of 100 mph (155 km/h) and a minimum barometric pressure of at least 988 mbar (hPa; 29.18 inHg)." no need for "subsequently" if you have "the following day". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

 Done - Removed 'subsequently.' TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• Mention it was a Cat 2 at that time. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

 Done - Entered the additional information before the statistical items. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• "In New Brunswick, the waves hurt the lobster fishing industry." no need for "fishing", lobster is not a fish. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

✗ Not done - I disagree. Fishing applies to any act of attaining aquatic animals for food. See lobster fishing. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• "Overall, the hurricane caused slightly over $1.49 million in damages" you just mention that earlier. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

 Done - Removed that, kept the fatalities part. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• "The origins of the system can be traced to a tropical depression roughly midway between the Lesser Antilles and the west coast of Africa at 1800 UTC on September 7.[1]" don't link to Africa plz. Thank you. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

 Done - Delinked Africa. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• "Closer to the islands, ships reported a quickly intensifying tropical cyclone with low barometric pressures, " no need to link to ships :P YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

 Done - That link was to weather ship, but okay. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• "The storm fully transitioned into an extratropical cyclone " you just link to ET above, delink it please. Thank you. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

 Done - Delinked extratropical transition, since that is a redirect. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• " Thr schooner George Dresser ran aground" typo. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "Most of the hurricane's damage occurred in Nova Scotia, where the storm made landfall with winds of 85 mph (135 km/h) early on September 17.[1][3] " delink Nova Scotia, you link to it in the MH. Also, rmeove the peka inteisty lanfall, since you mention it in the MH. Try to avoid redundancy in the MH and impact. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

 Done - Removed the windspeed information but kept the date of landfall to keep consistent with the US section. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• "On September 16, strong waves produced by the hurricane disabled the Swedish freighter Laponia, which at the time was located 300 mi (480 km) east of Cape Hatteras, North Carolina. " delink common term. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

 Done - I assume you meant to delink freighter, which I have done. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• "The strong waves run a schooner in Bridgewater, damaging a wharf." does that make sense? how do you "run a schooner"? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

 Done - I intended something else. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

• "The strong winds disrupted power and telecommunication services in Moncton. The city's streets were blocked by trees blown down by strong winds." don't start back to back sentences with "the". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)

 Done - In the second sentence I have removed "the city's..." TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 01:27, 1 May 2013 (UTC)

Otherwise, it is decent. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:19, 30 April 2013 (UTC)