Talk:1946 Cleveland Browns season/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Go Phightins! (talk · contribs) 03:30, 17 October 2012 (UTC) I'll take a look in the coming days, but will start tomorrow, as I am too tired right now.

Thanks -- I'm here to answer any queries, as always. --Batard0 (talk) 08:51, 17 October 2012 (UTC)

Review

I'll just post some general thoughts as I go through.

Lead

Perhaps we could use a word other than "magnate"...I know what it means, but some might not. Entrepreneur, tycoon, I don't know.

• Changed to "tycoon". Thanks for the suggestion. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

The attendance figure seems a little out of place; though that could just be me.

• It does. Removed. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

Other pre-game summary sections

I think there may be a little too much on the founding of the AAFC rather than just the Cleveland Browns founding.

• Agreed. I shortened it considerably by removing a few sentences. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

What positions did the two reserves play?

• Added (tackle and guard). --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

The rest

Is there a reason that in the season table, some of the teams are linked and some aren't? Do the un-linked ones not have Wikipedia pages?

• All the teams have wikipedia pages. I linked them all. I think the reason some weren't linked was that they had appeared earlier in the table, but I think it does look slightly awkward to have some as links and some not. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

I'm not a big fan of the week four summary starting with the ticket prices, I feel like that should be at the end of the summary or in a separate section.

• Moved to the end. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

References

I know I've said this before, and I know it's hard, but honestly, some non-Piascik references would be nice. I understand they provide comprehensive coverage, but it just seems the more the merrier in terms of sources.

• I will try to find some more -- there are a limited number of sources I know about that cover the season in depth, but I'll see what I can do in the next day or so on this point. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

Final thoughts

Well, as usual, you've invested the time and effort into getting this up to almost GA status, and I'm inclined to accept pending the slight modifications suggested above. Keep up the good work!

• Thanks much for the review -- great suggestions and improvements, as always. --Batard0 (talk) 04:08, 18 October 2012 (UTC)

I've listed

Congrats on another GA. Go Phightins! 20:11, 18 October 2012 (UTC)