Talk:1946 World Snooker Championship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:08, 14 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

The section can be split into two paragraphs with a new one starting from the mention of the BACC

"All matches except the final were to be of 31frames," - missing space between "31" and "frames"

"The final would be played over 73 frames at a location determined by the BACC, expected to be over one week but with the BACC having the option to extend the duration to two weeks." - repetition of "BACC"

Reworded to "last one week", as the source wording says "The final will consist of 73 games - one week's play. The Council reserves the right to extend the duration of the final to two weeks if found expedient." BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:27, 14 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

"The Championship attracted a total of 14 entries; 13 were originally announced[12]" - a total of 13 were originally announced,
"announced[12] with Fred Lawrence being added a few days later.[13]" - comma missing from the first citation in this text

"aced Sydney Lee at the Clifton Hotel in in Blackpool." - extra unneeded use of the word "in"
"Fred Davis played Alec Brown in the second match to be played at the Clifton Hotel." - which dates?

"scheduled each day (except on 12 May when there was no play)" - full stop is missing from this sentence
"he told the Daily Mirror that" - sentence should begin with a capital letter
"Lindrum, however, won the first three frames of the third session to lead 8–7, before Davis responded by winning the last three frames and regaining the lead at 10–8" - repetition of "w(o)inning"
"and finishing the day at a 14–10 lead." - leading 14–10.
"The final attracted full houses," - text in bold is informal
"He only needed 7 minutes 15 seconds" - a comma is missing between the time period

"he received a replica of the World Championship trophy." - in what year did Davis receive this trophy replica?

I've removed this as the testimonial fund (to buy him the replica trophy and a silver tea set) wasn't launched until September 1948, so, on reflection, the statement seems a bit out of scope for this article. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:04, 14 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

"Kingsley Kennerley met Fred Lawrence from 7–9 January" - 7 to January
"accoring to David Williams in the Daily Herald," - spelling error
" Shropshire with Kennerley,[73], and Newman defeated Stanbury" - the extra comma is unneeded
"Newman defeated Stanbury in their match held from 11–13 February" - 11 to 13 February
Also add the final score to the above sentence

Shall place the review on hold to enable the nominator to address or query each of the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 13:45, 14 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Many thanks for reviewing this, MWright96. I've replied to everything above. Let me know if any further work is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:06, 14 July 2021 (UTC)Reply