Talk:1948 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 19:00, 3 January 2016 (UTC)
- "The 1948 Atlantic hurricane season was average, featuring a total of 10 storms, which matched historical seasonal mean of ten." - this needs a reference. Ditto "and the number of intense hurricanes surpassed the average of two"
- Removed--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "The season featured one tropical storm in May, and it was among 18 tropical systems that formed in the month of May in the Atlantic basin. " - no idea where you get this info from. List of off-season Atlantic hurricanes has many more than 18. And you can't say at the time, as some storms were only discovered later.
- Removed that as well--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "Of the 10 tropical disturbances detected operationally" - why operationally? I'm not sure the first storm was detected operationally, given that it wasn't named.
- Oops, it should be 9. I went by the MWR, which omits TS 7--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "A minimal hurricane struck southern Louisiana, causing tides of 5 ft (1.5 m) and winds of 78 mph (126 km/h) in New Orleans. " - when?
- March 17, 1995? :P --12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "100-mile-per-hour (161 km/h) " - why do you spell it out this time? Also, why no rounding?
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "A Category 4 hurricane struck the Florida Keys and the Everglades, resulting in $12 million of damages in the state. After the passage of one week, another hurricane affected the region as a Category 2 storm, after crossing Cuba with winds of 125 mph (201 km/h). " - you don't say what month, and watch for rounding. The entire article could use a double check for rounding; I see problems in TS 1,
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "The tropical system brought widespread precipitation to Hispaniola, and widespread flooding took place across the region." - don't say "widespread" twice
- What's the problem? Is it a widespread issue? :P --12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "Several people went missing in the floodwaters.[9] An estimated 80 people died." - merge?
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- Where does HURDAT say "an area of disturbed weather developed in the northern Gulf of Mexico." Use meta when in doubt, and see what wording they use for precursor. How come you don't use meta for TS 2, btw? And you don't mention the peak winds.
- Actually, it was the MWR. I didn't use Meta because I was looking at an outdated version :P Anyway, Meta doesn't say anything different. Added the storm's peak wind--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- What was H3's peak? Why don't you mention it in prose?
- Added--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "about 300 mi (483 km)" - rounding
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- Any other US effects for H3? It looks like it came very close.
- Apparently not--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "Among the structures damaged included Abbott and Haliburton store, which lost its roof, and the Church of England, which the storm completely destroyed." - these seem pretty trivial (the store names), and the church isn't the Church of England, but rather a. Find a different way of saying this, make it broader.
- Better?--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "Port au Port alone suffered about $200,000 in damage." - for this and the other damage total for the storm, USD or CAD?
- This would have been CAD--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "Along the shore, a number of pleasure crafts were wrecked." - what is this?
- Pleasure crafts? If so, I wikilinked it--12george1 (talk) 04:16, 6 January 2016 (UTC)
- "Charlie continued to weaken as it approached Hattiesburg on September 5 and moved over the area with winds of 40 mph (64 km/h). " - why specify this? And why no mention of the meta data?
- Removing that--12george1 (talk) 00:51, 8 January 2016 (UTC)
- H5 could use inland effects. [1] - this shows Michigan rainfall. Also, [2] here is better Louisiana info.
- Added info--12george1 (talk) 00:51, 8 January 2016 (UTC)
- H6 needs a ref that it was named Dog
- I have a source for it being named "Cat" :P Why Dog, when I didn't include an in-text citation for any of them? Actually, I explained this in the notes section--12george1 (talk) 03:53, 8 January 2016 (UTC)
- "downing power lines and felled trees" - I'm not sure this makes sense grammatically. It implies "downing... felled trees", but if the trees were felled, then downing doesn't work. You could remove that word, but I'm not sure if you're going for something else.
- Removed "felled"--12george1 (talk) 03:53, 8 January 2016 (UTC)
- "Overall, the hurricane caused eight fatalities." - 6 (from one ship) + 1 (from the other ship) + 2 = 9. Also, italicize the ship names
- I blame the main article :P Actually, there was only one on land. So 8 is still correct. The death from the Gaspar was counted twice--12george1 (talk) 03:53, 8 January 2016 (UTC)
- For H8, you should specify the landfall in the Florida Keys was followed by additional strengthening over water. Right now, I was confused how the storm continued to intensify after striking Florida. Maybe say the second Florida landfall was on the mainland?
- Well, it's just an island chain. You were there pretty recently, right? :P --12george1 (talk) 03:53, 8 January 2016 (UTC)
- What happened to the end of H8? You stop talking about it when it became extratropical, but there is still history afterward.
- Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:53, 8 January 2016 (UTC)
- Did H10 affect the coast?
- Other than a hurricane warning, it looks like George was a good ol' boy that year :P --12george1 (talk) 03:53, 8 January 2016 (UTC)
All in all a decent article, but some spots seem sloppy or incomplete. Still, it shouldn't be too tough to finish, so I'll leave the article on hold for now. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 19:00, 3 January 2016 (UTC)