Talk:1962 San Diego Chargers season

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Sammi Brie in topic GA review

GA review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 03:55, 2 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  

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Most of the changes are technical. More than half are commas to remove or add. There is also some polish on reference formatting and a note that probably should be given to everyone at WP:NFL. @Harper J. Cole: 7-day hold for improvements, ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • tc) 04:29, 2 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

@Sammi Brie: Thanks, I think I've fixed these. The draft table is one I had to make myself, as the NFL template didn't fit for AFL teams. I've corrected it for the other 60's seasons that I've done as well. Harper J. Cole (talk) 17:46, 2 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Harper J. Cole: It looks good. Glad I was able to get to this one. Sammi Brie (she/her • tc) 20:13, 2 April 2022 (UTC)Reply

Copy changes

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  • I did this by script, but dashes should either be an en dash with spaces – like these – or an en dash without spaces—like this one.

Offseason

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  • Chargers' chief scout Don — no apostrophe here as an adjective, not a possessive
  • Comma needed after Mitinger's entry
  • but was later quoted should either have the comma dropped or change to "but he was later quoted".
  • This is because a comma and conjunction together are used to link two complete sentences. "Was later quoted as saying..." is not a complete sentence. If you can remove the comma/conjunction (or semicolon) and both sentences stand alone, it's fine.

Preseason

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  • However, Paul Lowe fractured his right arm, and missed the entire regular season — remove the comma after "arm" for the same reason

Regular season

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  • Injuries played a major role in the Chargers' campaign, with eight players missing at least half the season, and twenty-three missing at least two games — see comma issue above. The second comma should go.
  • But put a comma after Dick Wood for consistent use of serial comma.
  • Remove comma after 24 interceptions
  • Remove comma after leading receivers
  • Remove comma after haul of the previous season and put both refs at the end of that sentence. "Ranked fourth..." is not a complete sentence.
  • Remove comma after among the injured
  • Change , and ran one of those back to , running one of those back
  • Add comma before "respectively"
  • Remove comma after best in the league

If you see RMC, it means "remove comma".

Week 1
  • RMC The Broncos blocked a Blair field goal attempt early on, and drove 56 yards the other way for the opening touchdown.
  • The semicolon after produced a turnover should be a colon
Week 2
  • RMC than the Titans (20–13)
Week 3
  • Missing word finished the game a pair
Week 5
  • RMC game's first play, but was knocked out of the game
  • RMC after a fumble recovery, but extended the
  • Change Dawson then threw two touchdowns, either side of a successful onside kick, to Dawson then threw two touchdowns on either side of a successful onside kick,
  • Comma after "two touchdowns"
Week 6
  • RMC Buffalo outgained San Diego 439–115, and had
Week 7
  • Change "seventeen point" to "17-point"
  • RMC squander that chance, but soon made amends
Week 9
  • RMC two interceptions, while
Week 12
  • Add comma Karas recovered a fumble and Kocourek's 26-yard touchdown catch followed on the next play. (These are both complete sentences.)
  • Comma after "a penalty" but not after "San Diego back"
  • Hyphenate "4th-down"
  • Remove apostrophe in "The Charger's"
Week 13
  • Hyphenate "12 yard"

References

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  • Run IABot to archive the newspaper references.
  • The gamebook citations should indicate the website.
  • References look good, mostly Pro Football Reference, the paywalled Pro Football Researchers material, and newspapers.
  • Add ESPN as a work for reference 93.
  • For date style consistency, consider installing the User:Ohconfucius/script/MOSNUM dates scripts and running them when you're done.

Other

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  • The image of Jack Kemp is public domain. It does need an alt tag: add |alt=Refer to caption here, as the caption is sufficient alt text.
  • This issue is one that's a bit bigger than this page, but the tables should have captions. Every data table should have one: see MOS:TABLECAPTION. This should be a standard for any tables, because it assists users who use screen readers. I've done this for you because you may not be familiar with this. I'd like to note that reference citations can go in captions, and they can be styled like the existing draft table. The tables using {{NFL final staff}} have this implemented on the template end. It's likely that very few NFL pages are following this.