Talk:1973 Brooklyn hostage crisis

GA Review

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Reviewer: Argenti Aertheri (talk · contribs) 03:19, 9 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review

Last updated at 2024-01-16 06:22:39 by Qwerfjkl (bot)

See what the criteria are and what they are not

1) Well-written

1a) the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct

1b) it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation

2) Verifiable with no original research

2a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline

2b) reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose)

2c) it contains no original research

2d) it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism

3) Broad in its coverage

3a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic

3b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style)

4) Neutral:

4) Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each

5) Stable:

5) Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute

6) Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio

6a) media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content

6b) media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions

Overall:

Comments

• Are images available?
• Needs copy editing. I've fixed the minor issues, but it needs a through going over.
• "The defense contended that they held up the store to acquire weapons for self-defense because they feared attacks by their rivals, the Black Muslims." - reword to put that into context in a quote

I'm going to put this on hold for a week (Wednesday). @AdoTang: & @Epicgenius:, you've both put a lot of work into this, so maybe you can get it up to GA standards in a week. I've certainly seen weirder things happen!

Hey, thanks for reviewing this.

• Unfortunately, just about every single photo of the incident was taken by The New York Times, which I believe we can't use. I might try to add a map pinpointing where the incident occurred, though I don't know how to work with maps.
• I'll give the article a look-over, but I thought it was pretty okay last time I checked.
• I'll see what I can do.

AdoTang (talk) 16:56, 9 August 2023 (UTC)

@Argenti Aertheri: Expanded the article and touched upon some stuff you mentioned. I plan to add a map pinpointing the location soon if I can. Any other pointers? AdoTang (talk) 03:16, 11 August 2023 (UTC)

That is unfortunate about the images, I just spent a bit playing with maps though. You can stick this directly in the info box, or change it to say whatever you want. It's using Template:Maplink (failed attempted removed, see next) ~ Argenti Aertheri^(Chat?) 03:59, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

ETA: of course it won't preview properly, I'll get a copy working in my sandbox ~ Argenti Aertheri^(Chat?)

I still think it needs some copy editing, but now that I understand what it's trying to say I can take care of that myself. Looks like you've fixed most everything else, and images aren't required in order to pass, so it'll likely be good to go tomorrow. I'm done for the night though, I'll CE it probably late tomorrow and then pass it. ~ Argenti Aertheri^(Chat?) 04:20, 12 August 2023 (UTC)

@AdoTang: I just finished a thorough copy edit, please make sure everything still looks good to you. If so, do you want me to add a map before I pass it? ~ Argenti Aertheri^(Chat?) 01:36, 13 August 2023 (UTC)

Once I pass this I'm going to see if I can find a link directly to that last citation. I had marked it a bad link because it redirects to the site's homepage. ~ Argenti Aertheri^(Chat?) 03:38, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by Cielquiparle (talk) 15:51, 2 September 2023 (UTC)

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• ... that the 1973 Brooklyn hostage crisis has been described as the "birthplace of hostage negotiation"? Source: "One NYPD captain calls that event “the birthplace of hostage negotiation”, because all parties ultimately chose a peaceful resolution."
  • ALT1: ... that prior to the 1973 Brooklyn hostage crisis, most American police officers preferred to resolve hostage-takings with deadly force instead of crisis negotiation? Source: "Harvey Schlossberg said that in a hostage situation, police officers “all believed, ‘If you gave me the right gun with the right bullet, I can put everybody out.’” ... “But I don’t think it works that easy,” he said. “That’s a Hollywood thing.”"
  • ALT2: ... that during the 1973 Brooklyn hostage crisis, the New York City Police Department and Harvey Schlossberg considered allowing the hostage-takers to leave the country in exchange for the hostages? Source: "The top officers apparently did give somewhat more consideration to providing free passage out of the country—if the gunmen had bargained for release of the hostages."
  • ALT3: ... that according to some bystanders, the 1973 Brooklyn hostage crisis was "better than the Super Bowl"? Source: "“This is better than pro football,” somebody says. “This is better than the Super Bowl.” The crowd laughs. Half the people want the gunmen to come out fighting. The other half want the cops to go in shooting. Everybody wants blood."
  • ALT4: ... that the 1973 Brooklyn hostage crisis was a direct result of a massacre of Muslims the day prior? Source: "The defense, on the other hand, argued that the Sunni Muslims, who are supposed to be pacifists, planned the robbery in order to get guns for self‐protection. The day before the sporting‐goods holdup, seven members of their sect had been killed in a massacre in a house in Washington."
  • Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Tommy Villiers

Improved to Good Article status by AdoTang (talk). Self-nominated at 19:11, 18 August 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/1973 Brooklyn hostage crisis; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy compliance:

• Adequate sourcing:
• Neutral:
• Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing: - The Earwig result shows 43.8% similarity. Most of it is quotes but there are some instances of close paraphrasing. A few instances are:
  • "The killings occurred... had seemingly turned away from the Nation of Islam"
  • "The NYPD's 90th Precinct... by a silent alarm and a Bushwick High School student who managed to escape"
  • "... a typist had incorrectly described one of the weapons"

I would check Earwig and the sources and try to make sure that everything has been put into your own words.

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: If you can just resolve the close paraphrasing issues above, I'm happy to pass this review. Sammielh (talk) 17:33, 19 August 2023 (UTC)

• @Sammielh: Reworded these lines and a few others. Earwig now says 39.4% for the Bushwick Daily source as of typing this, and almost all of the flags are for quotes. AdoTang (talk) 00:24, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
  • @AdoTang: Thank you for rewording. I've taken another look and it is now almost entirely quotes and names being picked up by earwig. The source for ALT2 doesn't specifically say that Schlossberg was one of the people considering that approach but I'm happy to approve any of the other hooks. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sammielh (talk • contribs)