Talk:1979 Boston University strike/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by ExcellentWheatFarmer in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: ExcellentWheatFarmer (talk · contribs) 18:57, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
Greetings! I shall be handling this review. I'll try to have it done within the next day or two. ExcellentWheatFarmer (talk) 18:57, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
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General Comments
edit- The article should have a short description.
- Done.
- Article passes Earwig's copyvio detector.
- The article and it's corresponding talk page are all stable.
- There is no original research in the article.
- Sources are all reliable and laid out correctly.
- It is set out in accordance with the manual of style.
- The article keeps a neutral tone throughout.
- The images are all free and used appropriately - I would recommend adding Alt Text to them, although it isn't mandatory.
- Alt text added.
- The article covers the events leading up to and including the strike quite well, as well as the aftermath.
Onto the prose.
Lede
edit- The second paragraph of the lede is quite large and cumbersome - consider adding a break in the middle.
- Second paragraph split into two paragraphs.
- "mandated that the university commence negotiations with the union" -> "mandated that the university had to commence negotiations with the union"
- Done.
- "neither side come to a solid agreement" -> "neither side came to a solid agreement"
- Done.
President Silber and opposition from faculty
edit- "In particular, he pushed for university department's to hire friends of his at inflated pay and vetoed some recommendations for academic tenure, especially for professors who had expressed a left-leaning political stance." -> "In particular, Silber pushed for departments to hire friends of his at an inflated pay, and vetoed some recommendations for academic tenure, particularly for professors who had expressed a left-leaning political stance."
- Done.
- "while eight members of the BU board of trustees also called on him to resign." -> "as did eight members of the BU board of trustees."
- Done.
- "had never received so many complaints targeting a single institution as they had received with regards to Silber's administration at BU." -> "had never received as many complaints targeting a single institution as they had with regards to Silber's administration at BU."
- Done.
- "Regardless of all this, Silber managed to solidify his power amongst the university's administration and remained the university's president until retiring from that position in 2000." Does this really fit here? If anything this should go in the Aftermath section.
- Moved this sentence to the "Aftermath" section.
Clerical workers and librarians organize
edit- "While the faculty was organizing, so to were clerical workers and librarians employed at BU." -> "As the faculty was organizing, the clerical workers and librarians were working alongside them."
- Done.
- "Meanwhile, a group of about 25 librarians unionized with Local 925, a joint union organized by the Service Employees International Union and 9to5, National Association of Working Women, a feminist labor organization that had been founded in Boston in 1973." Split this sentence.
- Done.
Tentative agreement reached
edit- This paragraph definitely needs splitting into two. It's too bulky as is.
- Split this paragraph into two.
- "The previous day, Silber had held a closed-doors meeting at the Algonquin Club with several prominent members of the board and according to historian Gary Zabel, the decision to ask for these changes had been determined then." -> "The previous day, Silber had held a closed-doors meeting at the Algonquin Club with several prominent members of the board. According to historian Gary Zabel, the decision to ask for these changes had been determined then."
- Done.
Course of the strike
edit- "The Daily Free Press, BU's student newspaper" -> "BU's student newspaper The Daily Free Press"
- Done.
- "while support from graduate students was even stronger" -> "and that support from graduate students was even stronger"
- Done.
- "By the end of the first day, the union reported that about 100 percent of the professors in the College of Liberal Arts were on strike, while a majority of the professors in both the College of Engineering and the School of Law continued to hold classes." -> "By the end of the first day, the union reported that about 100 percent of the professors in the College of Liberal Arts were on strike. However, the majority of the professors in both the College of Engineering and the School of Law continued to hold classes."
- Done.
- "as well as a" -> "and as a"
- Done.
- "Additional support for the strike came from some maintenance workers, whose union allowed members to participate in the strike on an individual basis." -> "Additional support for the strike came from the maintenance workers, whose union allowed members to participate in the strike on an individual basis."
- Done.
Aftermath
edit- "In December 1979, in partial response to these efforts, the faculty voted to urge for Silber's firing, as it had done in the past, but these calls were dismissed by Silber and other members of the board of trustees." -> "In December 1979, the faculty once again voted to urge for Silber's removal, but these calls were dismissed by Silber and other members of the board of trustees."
- Done.
- "In 1980, the U.S. Supreme Court ruled in the court case NLRB v. Yeshiva University that professors at private universities, because they held managerial powers, were not protected to unionize under the terms of the National Labor Relations Act of 1935." -> "In 1980, the U.S. Supreme Court ruled in the court case NLRB v. Yeshiva University that professors at private universities were not protected to unionize under the terms of the National Labor Relations Act of 1935, as they held managerial powers."
- Done.
- "In retrospect...1960s and 1970s." Put this into past tense.
- Done.
@JJonahJackalope That'll be everything. Add these changes, and then I'm happy to pass! ExcellentWheatFarmer (talk) 20:27, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
- ExcellentWheatFarmer Thank you for starting this review. I have made some edits that address the points of your review and think it should be good to go! Thanks again, and if you have any further questions, comments, or concerns, please reach out. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 01:13, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
- Nope. Good to go. Congrats on the GA! ExcellentWheatFarmer (talk) 01:17, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.