Talk:1992 European Community Monitor Mission helicopter downing/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 09:03, 4 December 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 09:03, 4 December 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • Our bête noir: They were flying from Yugoslav capital "the" Yugoslav
  • Probably too much detail here: The missile fired from the starboard wing flew between the two helicopters, while the one fired from the port side wing struck the engine Better, I think, to say that one missile flew between the helicopters and the other hit the engine.
  • Correct the lede. Only one Italian and the French observer were officers, the others were non-commissioned officers. And fix the following sentence as well.
  • decorated Italian ECMM "the" Italian
  • Delete the "the" here: causing the Jat Airways
  • Put the title of Lucarelli in title case.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:33, 10 December 2013 (UTC)Reply

Thank you for the review. I believe I have addressed the concerns you raised above.--Tomobe03 (talk) 15:28, 10 December 2013 (UTC)Reply