Talk:2/33rd Battalion (Australia)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 08:50, 4 October 2015 (UTC)

Progression

• Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
• Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

• Citations: The Citation Check tool reveals no issues with reference consolidation (no action req'd)
• Disambiguations: no dab links [3] (no action req'd).
• Linkrot: one dead link [4]:
  • Long, Gavin (1963). The Final Campaigns. Australia in the War of 1939–1945. Series 1 – Army. Volume VII (1st ed.). Canberra, Australian Capital Territory: Australian War Memorial. OCLC 1297619 (the AWM has changed all their urls and didn't leave redirects, its probably affected thousands of our articles...sigh)
• Alt text: images all have alt text [5] (no action req'd).
• Copyright violations: The Earwig Tool reveals no issues with copyright violations or close paraphrasing (seems to be picking up combinations of proper nouns and common words which cannot be avoided) [6] (no action req'd).
• Duplicate links: no duplicate links to be removed (no action req'd).

Criteria

• It is reasonably well written.

  a (prose): b (MoS):

  • Prose here is slightly repetitive: "...final campaign in Borneo in the final..." (final twice in the same sentence). Perhaps reword one?
  • "During this time, the battalion was allocated the role of mobile reserve, assigned the task of counter-attacking around Harwich in the event of an invasion..." I'd suggest clarifying this by stating "German invasion" (some of our younger readers actually might not know who was preparing to invade England at this time for instance)
  • Wikilink Glasgow, Freetown, Durban, Beit Jirja, Lae
  • "Casualties sustained by the battalion in Syria and Lebanon number...", typo I think here (probably should be "numbered", this might have been from an earlier edit of mine...)
  • "...entrained and undertook a five-day train journey...", seems a little tautological (entraining on a train), perhaps reword?
  • This doesn't quite work: "The Australians subsequently launched an advance which saw them pursue the Japanese – who had reached the limits of their supply line..." The Japanese began to withdraw then the Australians advanced in pursuit. You probably just need to reorder the components of the sentence to make it work though.
  • " preparing for an airlift into Nadzab", wikilink Nadzab here (you do so later)
  • Repetitive language: "During the initial landing, the 2/33rd formed part of the floating reserve, but after the initial stages of the assault it came ashore on the second day along with the 25th Brigade's two other infantry battalions,[25] and initially" (initial and initially)
  • Is there something missing from this sentence? "After a month of fighting the war ended and following the conclusion of hostilities in August 1945."
  • "which was raised for occupation duties..." add "in Japan" for clarity.

• It is factually accurate and verifiable.

  a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

  • The article looks well referenced to WP:RS.
  • No issues with OR I could see.
  • "Morley, Dave (26 September 2013). "The Tragic Story of Nadzab". Army News: The Soldiers' Newspaper (1314 ed.). p. 21." It might be helpful to provide a link to this article (available here [7]), also perhaps provide the issn for Army News (0729-5685)?

• It is broad in its coverage.

  a (major aspects): b (focused):

  • The article uses an effective summary style covering the topic succinctly, but including most major aspects.
  • One point: "Casualties were heavy, and by the time it was withdrawn to Port Moresby..." perhaps some mention should be made of the outcome of the fighting around Gona? (i.e. the eventual destruction of the Japanese beachhead etc).

• It follows the neutral point of view policy.

  a (fair representation): b (all significant views):

  • All major viewpoints seem to be covered.

• It is stable.

  No edit wars etc.:

  • No issues here.

• It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

  a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:

  • Do File:Jacksons Strip.jpg and File:Australian troops from the 2-25th and 2-33rd Battalions patrolling in New Guinea 1942 (AWM photo 027060).jpg need PD US tags?
  • Captions look fine.

• Overall:

  a Pass/Fail:

  • This article looks very good to me overall, just a few (mostly) prose points and some image tags to deal with / discuss. Anotherclown (talk) 10:03, 4 October 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, I think I've gotten all of these points now. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 09:14, 5 October 2015 (UTC)

Cheers, passing now. Good work. Anotherclown (talk) 10:50, 5 October 2015 (UTC)