Talk:2000 Belgian Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 14:59, 14 February 2015 (UTC)

I am more of an F1 fan than I am a NASCAR one, so I will be more than happy to review this. The review should be up soon. good888 (talk) 14:59, 14 February 2015 (UTC)

Review is now complete. good888 (talk) 11:47, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

Lead section

• "Michael Schumacher finished second in a Ferrari car" Remove the word "car" from this sentence.
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• Similar to the NASCAR articles, do you have the attendance?
  • Unfortunately, I was unable to find any attendance figures. They are not widely published for Formula One races Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

Report

• "Prior to the race, Panis announced that he was moving to the BAR team for the 2001 season." Rewrite "to the BAR team" to just "to BAR"
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "The Benetton team announced Jenson Button would move from the Williams team to replace Wurz." Read the issue above.
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "This was due to an ongoing dispute over Belgium tobacco advertising laws." Mind if you explain this a bit better?
  • It was due to tobacco sponsorship being outlawed and most teams carried tobacco products on their cars Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "meeting in Paris in October 1999." Link Paris. Also do you know what day the meeting occured?
  •  Done and the meeting was held on 6 October 1999 Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Alesi's Prost car was afflicted with an fuel pressure problem" Remove the word "car" from this sentence.
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Button qualified third, and was happy with his starting position." Source please. Also I would rewrite to: "Button qualified third, and stated that he was happy with his starting position."
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Later in the session, Villeneuve damaged his car's rear end in a crash." Did he need to use the spare car? If so, note this. If not, then state that he was able to continue.
  • Villeneuve did not need the spare car and has been added in the article Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "During the formation lap Diniz spun off and was overtaken by de la Rosa." Hang on, you just stated there was no formation lap.
  • Reworded Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "By lap 5, Häkkinen had opened his lead over Trulli to 10 seconds, ahead of Michael Schumacher, Button and Coulthard. Michael Schumacher took second place when he passed Trulli on the same lap. Button then immediately attempted to pass Trulli although he made contact with the Jordan driver. Trulli was sent into a spin and became the first retirement of the race." I noticed that Trulli retired on lap 4 according to the classification section. Shouldn't the description of the collision be in the lap 4 description or did he retire on lap 5?
  • I have reworded the sentence slightly although all Formula One classifications note that drivers retire after completing the number of laps they have done. As Trulli started but did not complete the 5th lap, the classification stays as it is. Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "The race order was Häkkinen, Michael Schumacher, Ralf Schumacher, Alesi, Button, Villeneuve, Barrichello, Frentzen, Coulthard, Diniz, Herbert, Irvine, Zone, Salo, Gené, Verstappen, de la Rosa, Heidfeld, Wurz and Mazzacane." I think you mean Zonta and not Zone.
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Jean Alesi became the first driver to pit for dry tyres on lap 4." I don't think this image is needed.
  • Removed Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Ricardo Zonta was lapped by Häkkinen and Michael Schumacher while battling for the lead." Rewrite to: "Ricardo Zonta was lapped by Häkkinen and Michael Schumacher while they were battling for the lead."
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "and Frentzen rounding out the points scoring positions in sixth." Change rounding to rounded.
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Hakkinen was simply much faster today, even though we improved the car from yesterday to today and from the last race to this one. We do not feel we have lost the championship. Everyone is still pushing very hard in the team. I picked up six points today. The championship is still alive." I don't think the quote template is needed here.
  • Removed quote template Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "Häkkinen's overtake was later voted by more than 60 Formula One historians as the MasterCard Priceless Moment of the 2000 F1 season in February 2001." Link MasterCard.
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)
• "The usage of the safety car to start the race was praised by figures within the sport." I don't think it was praised. I mean, Martin Brundle and Nigel Roebuck both criticized it. I would state it received a mixed response instead.
  • Reworded Z105space (Talk to me!)
• "Williams increased the gap to Benetton to 18 points, with Benetton remaining fifth on 12 points." Rewrite to: Williams increased the gap to Benetton to 12 points, with Jordon remaining fifth on 13 points."
  •  Done Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

Classification

• Add an image of Hakkinen stating he was still leading the championship.
•  Done

References

• None of the references are broken. So that's good.

Going to place on hold for now. good888 (talk) 11:47, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

• @Good888: I think that's all the points dealt with this article Z105space (Talk to me!) 13:34, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

• Well done. Promoting to GA class. good888 (talk) 15:21, 18 February 2015 (UTC)