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Reviewer: Biblioworm (talk · contribs) 00:22, 1 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

Here is my review:

Is the article well-written? - Unfortunately, no. There are many problems with clarity, typos, and grammar. I've listed as many as I can below.

    • The team was John Beilein's fourth conference champion and his second at Michigan.
      • This sentence is unclear. How can a team be a person's conference champion?
    • The entering class was highlighted by a pair of state Boys Basketball Gatorade Players of the Year in Indiana Mr. Basketball Zak Irvin and Derrick Walton who was runner-up in the Mr. Basketball of Michigan.
    • In the Conference portion of the schedule, Michigan won its first 8 games, including a stretch of three games in which it defeated top ten opponents in consecutive games, a feat no Division I team has accomplished since the 2006–07 NCAA Division I men's basketball season.
    • The team defeated the same ranked opponent twice in the same season for the first time in thirteen seasons.
    • The team was led by 2014 NCAA Men's Basketball All-American consensus second team selection and Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Player of the Year Stauskas who was a unanimous first team All-B1G selection.
      • How can a team be led by "2014 NCAA Men's Basketball All-American consensus second team selection"?
    • On June 27, 2013 Burke was selected 9th in the 2013 NBA Draft by the Minnesota Timberwolves and then traded to the Utah Jazz for the 14th and 21st picks, which were used to select Shabazz Muhammad and Gorgui Dieng.
    • The earliest preseason predictions came the day after the 2013 NCAA Men's Division I Basketball Tournament, which was before final decisions were made regarding declaring for the 2013 NBA Draft by college players and before many high school players had signed their National Letters of Intent regarding their 2013 matriculations.
    • On May 30, Sporting News' Mike DeCourcy selected Michigan number seven.
    • During the first week of the season, the team elected, Robinson, Jordan Morgan and Jon Horford as team captains.
    • Michigan played Duke in the ACC–Big Ten Challenge on December 3 at Cameron Indoor Stadium.[87] The game will take place at 9:15 local time and be broadcast on ESPN following the game between Indiana and Syracuse that is scheduled to start two hours earlier.
    • Stauskas and LeVert both establish career highs in points as they combined to go 11 for 13 from beyond the three point line and Horford added a career-high 15 rebounds.
    • On January 18, Michigan defeated (#3 AP/#3 Coaches)[129] Wisconsin at the Kohl Center for the first time since the 1998–99 team did so on February 27, 1999 against the 1998–99 Badgers,[130][131] ending an 11-game losing streak at Wisconsin.
    • In the game Michigan rebounded from an early 22–11 deficit to win 79–70.
    • John Beilein was a one of ten finalists for the United States Basketball Writers Association (USBWA)'s Henry Iba National Coach of the Year Award.
  • Is the article verifiable? - Yes.
  • Is the article broad? - The article does address the main aspects of the topic, but I think it goes into unnecessary detail in some places. For example, I feel that there is too much space devoted to all the pre-season rankings.
  • Is the article neutral? - Mostly, but I am concerned that this article may give a general "best team ever" impression.
  • Is the article stable? - Yes.
  • Is the article illustrated? - It does have one picture, but if they are available, it would be nice to see a few more.

@TonyTheTiger: I've finished reviewing the article. Thanks for including more images and fixing some of the errors I mentioned above. I found a few more, though; I hope you don't mind fixing them.

Besides this, I feel that there's general clarity issues that are a bit difficult to pinpoint, and I'm still a little concerned that the pre-season rankings section might go into excessive detail. I really don't feel comfortable passing or failing, so I've decided that it would be best for me to seek a second opinion on these issues. Once again, thanks for your work in improving this article. Regards, --Biblioworm 02:40, 6 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

  • Biblioworm, I don't know about general clarity. I have tried to express everything as well as I could and to diligently provide WP:ICs from WP:RS to facilitate WP:V for anything that may be unclear, questioned or challenged. As far as preseason rankings go, I am willing to pare it down if people want that. I just added what I found and summarized it for the article. It has more preseason detail than the prior seasons which are GAs and FAs, but I don't know if it is undesirable. I am very pleased and grateful that you have taken the time to review the article closely and to help guide its improvement. I am very satisfied that you seek a 2nd opinion.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:30, 6 November 2014 (UTC)Reply
    • The "general clarity issues" I see might actually just be a result of my own lack of knowledge concerning sports (admittedly, I'm not the most avid sports watcher). The detail in the preseason rankings really isn't a huge concern, but I hope that readers don't just move on to the next paragraph because of the length. In any case, I think a second opinion from someone more knowledgeable about basketball would be useful in this review. I also apologize if I seem to be acting like a perfectionist. --Biblioworm 01:54, 7 November 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • @TonyTheTiger: Since I do not want this review to sit in the second opinion queue for months (that would probably happen), I decided to come back and reread the article with fresh eyes. I've decided that there is nothing wrong with the preseason section, but I found quite a few more clarity and grammar issues. I feel that this review would become unnecessarily long and tedious if I attempted to list all of them, so I think I'll unfortunately have to go with my gut feeling and ✗ Fail this review. Since I'm only human, I may very well be overlooking some things, so I recommend that you list this article at a place like Wikipedia:Peer review, where multiple people who may know more about basketball than I do can give recommendations on how to improve it. A GOCE copyediting request would probably be helpful, as well. Thanks! —Biblioworm 18:30, 28 November 2014 (UTC)Reply
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