Talk:2013 British Grand Prix/GA1
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Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm (talk · contribs) 03:30, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
Gonna review this one . Kpgjhpjm 03:30, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
Lead
edit- Change rear-left to left-rear to create consistency with the rest of the article .
- Change led race director Charlie Whiting to deploy the safety car. to led to race director Charlie Whiting deploying the safety car
- Alonso moved to within 21 points of the World Drivers' Championship leader Vettel. Kimi Räikkönen of the Lotus team remained in third position after finishing fifth and Hamilton stayed in fourth because of a recovery performance to finish fourth. In the World Constructors' Championship, Mercedes overtook Ferrari, 48 points behind Red Bull with eleven rounds remaining in the season.
This part can be reworded .
Background
edit- Tyre supplier Pirelli brought the white-banded medium and the orange-banded hard compound tyres and the green-banded intermediate and dark blue-banded full wet tyres to the race didn't Pirelli used to bring 3 dry compound tyres to the race .
- No the rules in 2013 stipulated that two tyres of dry tyre had to be brought to a race MWright96 (talk) 08:24, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
Practice
edit- and removed the front wing in a collision with the barrier at Club turn removed sounds a bit awkward.
- That's normal in the English language. Plus it is factually correct MWright96 (talk) 08:24, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
- Gutiérrez aquaplaned at the first corner and regained control of his car. Change and to but.
- Felipe Massa was limited to seven timed laps because he lost control of the rear of his Ferrari on a damp area at the exit of Stowe corner. He damaged the Ferrari's front suspension and slid across a inside tyre barrier before stopping at the entry to the pit lane.
Change to Felipe Massa was limited to seven timed laps because he lost control of the rear of his Ferrari on a damp area at the exit of Stowe corner and damaged the Ferrari's front suspension as he slid across and hit an inside tyre barrier before stopping at the entry to the pit lane.
- Done but with a few changes MWright96 (talk) 08:24, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
Qualifying
edit- using the tyres with which they set their quickest lap times. Set their quickest lap times in which session ?
- The third session MWright96 (talk) 08:24, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
- who traded pole position with his teammate Traded ?
- Reworded MWright96 (talk) 08:24, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
- Vettel and Webber were third and fourth; an error braking for Club corner lost Webber time.
This can be reworded and joined for bexternal flow .
Post-Qualifying
edit- No issues
Qualifying Classification
edit- No issues
Race
edit- The 52-lap race took place in the afternoon ... any specific time ? afternoon is a bit vague
- Clarified MWright96 (talk) 10:28, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
- drivers on heavy fuel loads ... who were the drivers ?
- Removed MWright96 (talk) 10:28, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
- Alonso overtook the Lotus duo of Räikkönen and Grosjean on the Hangar Straight and Vergne into Brooklands corner to move into fifth position. ... Didnt Alonso make a pit stop , he is up to fifth already ?
- Clarified earlier in the paragraph MWright96 (talk) 10:28, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
- Instead, he hit the rear of Di Resta's car on lap 37. That same lap, Toro Rosso retired Vergne in the pit lane with significant damage to his car... The incident caused any damage to Hamilton's car ? Was the significant damage from the tyre failure ?
- Clarified MWright96 (talk) 10:28, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
- positions to four remained on the circuit ... positions two to four ?
- Fixed MWright96 (talk) 10:28, 26 May 2020 (UTC)
- @MWright96: There are no more issues and all the references and images look to be good . So passing Kpgjhpjm 04:33, 28 May 2020 (UTC)
- Fixed MWright96 (talk) 10:28, 26 May 2020 (UTC)