Talk:2014–15 Michigan Wolverines men's basketball team/GA2

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 10:17, 15 October 2015 (UTC)Reply


Go on then, I'll take this beast on. Harrias talk 10:17, 15 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

Detailed review to follow Harrias talk 10:17, 15 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Lead

I'm going to take this bit by bit, so more to follow. Feel free to start making changes as we go, or leave it all to the end. Harrias talk 18:41, 19 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Departures
2014–15 team recruits, Future recruits
Post-tournament predictions
Offseason
Preseason
Roster
  • This section is hard to follow for a layperson, given all the "redshirt" jargon. If possible, try and write this so an idiot (me) could understand it. A specific problem is the term "to burn his redshirt" which I assume means he had to play, thus losing redshirt status, but even if so, it doesn't seem encyclopaedic language.
  • The last sentence says that DJ Wilson was redshirted, but he doesn't have the "Current redshirt" symbol in the table, only Duncan Robinson does. Is that a mistake, or am I misinterpreting the table?
Schedule
  • I haven't read beyond the first paragraph yet, but is written in the future tense, but I assume it is referring to events which have happened, therefore it needs the tense changing.

That's where I'll leave it for the moment, more to come. Harrias talk 14:56, 26 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Statistics

That completes my first run through. In general this is a decent article. The schedule section gets a little repetitive, but as it is describing a string of matches, that is unsurprising. I wasn't keen on the "the match featured so-and-so, the son/brother/nephew of former Michigan player so-and-so" which just seemed like superfluous trivia to me, but I'm not that bothered. A few jargon terms could do with wikilinking; I'd advise going through and making sure everything is linked on first mention. I'll put the article on hold for the moment. Harrias talk 13:10, 2 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

  • Thanks for your work on this. Sorry for the delay getting back to it. I've made a few changes, and I'm happy that it meets the GA criteria now, though I think the prose in particular would need work before it could go any further. Harrias talk 10:32, 22 November 2015 (UTC)Reply