Talk:2014 Emirates Cup/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Courcelles in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 21:50, 30 January 2018 (UTC)
- I'll take this one on tonight. Courcelles (talk) 21:50, 30 January 2018 (UTC)
- "the competition's inaugural edition was attended by over 110,000 people across the two days.[3]" Relevance to this edition?
- Removed and merged the first sentence with the other paragraph.
- "and Ligue 1 side Monaco" Why leave out the nationality for this one team?
- Tweaked this.
- "Monaco coach Leonardo Jardim fielded an expensively assembled team" Source for "expensively"?
- "which included midfielders João Moutinho and Geoffrey Kondogbia, and striker Falcao on the substitutes' bench." Reads like all three were substitutes? Is this accurate?
- Yes, tweaked sentence
- Also, in that sentence, the link for Falcao goes to a dab page.
- We have whole paragraphs for the day 1 games, yet almost nothing for the day 2 games, these need expanding, should be able to write a nice paragraph about both games that day.
- Split into two and reordered
- Attendance for day 1?
- Searched high and low, I think the club never did release the attendance figures.
- "The competition follows a point scoring system much like the Amsterdam Tournament," Relevance for mentioning this in lede, when you don't mention Amsterdam again?
- "Yaya Sanogo was the tournament's topscorer, with four goals." Topscorer isn't one word, I don't think.
- Images are appropriately licensed, page is stable.
That's it for me. Courcelles (talk) 17:18, 31 January 2018 (UTC)
- Pinging @Lemonade51: Courcelles (talk) 19:53, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for being patient @Courcelles:, have addressed all your comments. Lemonade51 (talk) 23:45, 2 February 2018 (UTC)
- Okay, then, passing. Courcelles (talk) 01:00, 3 February 2018 (UTC)