Talk:2014 Emirates Cup/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Courcelles in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 21:50, 30 January 2018 (UTC)Reply


  • "the competition's inaugural edition was attended by over 110,000 people across the two days.[3]" Relevance to this edition?
  • Removed and merged the first sentence with the other paragraph.
  • "and Ligue 1 side Monaco" Why leave out the nationality for this one team?
  • Tweaked this.
  • "Monaco coach Leonardo Jardim fielded an expensively assembled team" Source for "expensively"?
  • "which included midfielders João Moutinho and Geoffrey Kondogbia, and striker Falcao on the substitutes' bench." Reads like all three were substitutes? Is this accurate?
  • Yes, tweaked sentence
  • Also, in that sentence, the link for Falcao goes to a dab page.
  • We have whole paragraphs for the day 1 games, yet almost nothing for the day 2 games, these need expanding, should be able to write a nice paragraph about both games that day.
  • Split into two and reordered
  • Attendance for day 1?
  • Searched high and low, I think the club never did release the attendance figures.
  • "The competition follows a point scoring system much like the Amsterdam Tournament," Relevance for mentioning this in lede, when you don't mention Amsterdam again?
  • "Yaya Sanogo was the tournament's topscorer, with four goals." Topscorer isn't one word, I don't think.
  • Images are appropriately licensed, page is stable.

That's it for me. Courcelles (talk) 17:18, 31 January 2018 (UTC)Reply