Talk:2016 Paris ePrix

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:2016 Paris ePrix/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm (talk · contribs) 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)

Let us start this GA review . Kpgjhpjm 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• Please change in the Les Invalides building complex before a crowd of 20,000 . to in the Les Invalides building complex . A total of 20,000 people attended the race . Kpgjhpjm 16:31, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
• Please change but lost his advantage to DiGrassi on the run to the first corner . to but was passed by DiGrassi on the run to the first corner. Kpgjhpjm 16:36, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
• Please change but retained his hold on third position . to but managed to retain the third position in the Championship . Kpgjhpjm 16:46, 4 August 2018 (UTC)

@MWright96: It's late night in my time zone , I will review the rest of the article tomorrow . Kpgjhpjm 17:09, 4 August 2018 (UTC)

Background and preparation

1st paragraph

• Please change Coming into the race from Long Beach 3 weeks earlier. to After winning the previous round at Long Beach 3 weeks earlier , Kpgjhpjm 03:07, 5 August 2018 (UTC)
• Please change and Jerome D Ambrosio for Dragon had seven points less in the battle for the position. to , seven ahead of Jerome D Ambrosio of Dragon in the battle for third position . Kpgjhpjm 05:35, 5 August 2018 (UTC)

Second Paragraph

• No issues

Third Paragraph

• No issues

Fourth Paragraph

• No real issues , but I will be making a few tweaks .

Practice and Qualifying

First Paragraph

• In the first sentence remove the second occurrence of the word Sunday .
• The team names in the parenthesis is not needed . Kpgjhpjm 15:40, 5 August 2018 (UTC)

Second Paragraph

• No issues

Third Paragraph

• No issues

Fourth Paragraph

• Mostry OK , I have made a tweak though . Kpgjhpjm 15:40, 5 August 2018 (UTC)

Fifth Paragraph

• @MWright96: : Can you say what is meant by lost time in the first second . I think it might be lost time in the first sector. Kpgjhpjm 15:48, 5 August 2018 (UTC)

Race

This is the section with problems in many Motorsports articles .

First Paragraph

• When the race started . Remove the word when and capitalise T in the .

Second Paragraph

• Remove the word Nevertheless
• A tweaks will be made by me here .

Third Paragraph

• In the previous paragraph , it is stated that Buemi and Turvey were battling for fifth place , so when Buemi passed Turvey, he moved into fifth . So when he passed Sarrazin , that move should be for fourth .
• Please fix this - if di Grassi was leading , Vergne second , Bird third , and as per above sentence Buemi fourth , then where did Prost come from .

Fourth Paragraph

• Change due to the tight track to due to the tightness of the track .
• Change used FanBoost to used his FanBoost - he can' use the FanBoost of others .

Fifth Paragraph

• No issues

Post-Race

• No issues

Classification

• Question : Why are names of some drivers in bold ?

Comments

• On-hold for now , @MWright96: On these issues are fixed , I will take a final look and then promote the article. The issues in the Race section's third paragraph are very important ,So please take some time to fix them . When you are done , please ping me . Kpgjhpjm 12:54, 6 August 2018 (UTC)

@MWright96: Looks like all issues are fixed . Taking a final look . Kpgjhpjm 13:34, 6 August 2018 (UTC)

@MWright96: It's see no more issues , passing . Kpgjhpjm 13:42, 6 August 2018 (UTC)