Talk:2016 U.S. prison strike

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There is not enough information provided in the lead section.AngelDixon98 (talk) 17:02, 23 February 2017 (UTC)

With the little information provided, it emits a bias view. AngelDixon98 (talk) 17:02, 23 February 2017 (UTC)

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More information

This is a good start, but not enough background information Oscha12 (talk) 06:30, 26 February 2017 (UTC)

Good lead, but does the anniversary of the Atticus uprising relate to the 2016 prison strike? If so, draw the comparison as to why. Additionally, what is the Free Alabama Movement and Incarcerated Workers Organizing Committee? This is a lot of good info, but maybe add why these people were important to the strike. For the 13th amendment, I feel it'd be good to add what that amendment is and why it was expected to help end the strike. Overall, good article!--G erika (talk) 23:31, 3 March 2017 (UTC)

This article is good so far. The leader is great is filled with detail. One thing that the group should work on is the sentence structures. Some of the sentences were choppy, try combining two sentences. Also, add more information about the Incarcerated Workers Organizing Committee, I would like to know more instead of the just their goals. Overall, the article is coming along great! Rhorton10 (talk) 02:39, 5 March 2017 (UTC)

The article has a nice start, but it needs way more background information. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mmack32 (talk • contribs) 04:33, 6 March 2017 (UTC)

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Picture seems out of place and irrelevant

The image of the smiling white woman that's in this article now (April 2017) is a bit off. When I think of the face of the american prisoner, I don't see white and I don't see female (smiling neither). A more appropriate image would be one of a black man, or at least a black woman, but a black man would be most representative of those suffering under the prison system. Even better would be a picture of a group of participants in the strike, or a picture of one or more of the organizers. Either way, the current picture needs to change. Alialiac (talk) 17:50, 8 April 2017 (UTC)

I disagree about the significance of women imprisoned in the US but at minimum I agree it's not clear what this picture illustrates about the 2016 strike. I'll go ahead and remove it. Innisfree987 (talk) 18:13, 8 April 2017 (UTC)

13th Amendment

Your section on the thirteenth amendment feels out of place and irrelevant where it is. Maybe talk about it at the beginning, or work the information through the article so the information flows better.Lrichar (talk) 16:24, 12 April 2017 (UTC)