Talk:2019 WPA World Ten-ball Championship/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:28, 2 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


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  • "The event was to be held " perhaps "The event was originally scheduled to be held "?
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • " in Las Vegas, Nevada as part" comma after Nevada per MOS.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Was the event sponsored by anyone?
Just Predator Cues, I believe I'll add Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Doesn't say in the lead when the tournament took place.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "Single Elimination" in the infobox doesn't need that over-capitalisation.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Similarly nor does "Ten-Ball".
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Since this is a world tournament, just clarify that it's US $...
Where too? It is linked Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • The "three-year deal" is mentioned in the lead and not in the main part of the article. Should be the other way if anything, but if it stays in the lead, it needs to be covered in the main body.
It was mentioned, but not in as many words. Expanded   Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Similarly "SM City Activity Center" is only mentioned in the lead.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "as a double elimination tournament " our very own article is at double-elimination tournament. In the infobox it's called "Round robin", consistency?
yeah, wrong in the infobox. changed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Likewise the "single-elimination...."
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "the BCA National Ten-ball event." what is this? Who is BCA? No article so hard to fathom what this is about.
expanded. it was just ran in the same room as the national championships. However, it's a non-notable event. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "based on world pool rankings" presumably the world rankings for the ten-ball variant?
Nope. Actually, this doesn't even mean specific rankings. It means a certain amount of players qualified from each variant ranking list (X from the WPA, X from the EUro Tour, X from the China Tour). I'm not really sure much about how this worked, or about the qualifiers, I don't think it was publicised. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Any reason why it was moved?
Money, I'd assume. Manny Pacquiao (yes, the boxer) was the reason it was played in the Philippines in the first place, but there was some money issues. An actual reason outside of the "home of pool" bollocks wasn't really given. 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)
  • "the event.[1] The event was" repetitive.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "Double elimination matches were played as a race to eight racks.[3] Single elimination matches were played as a race-to-ten racks" consider merging these near identical sentences, and be consistent with the hyphenation!
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Prize money table:
    • Total needs to be last line regardless of sorting.
Made it unsortable, it doesn't need to be sortable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
    • Blank header for column one.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
    • Prize Money-> Prize money.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "his roommate Billy Thorpe i" I would qualify that with "event roommate".
Yeah, that does have some conotations. Changed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "All matches were played as race-to-eight racks." you already said that in the Format section.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • defeated van Boening : he seems to be a Van Boening.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Vilmos Földes is missing his diacritic on the o.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Early rounds section is a little too close to proseline for me, lots of very short sections...
should be better now 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)
  • "Chang Jung-lin" no capital L in there.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Are the rankings/seedings available for the knockout section?
I don't think there was an official seedings list for this competition. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Avoid spaced hyphens in the ref titles.
  • Avoid repeating the website name in the ref titles.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Avoid SHOUTING in the ref titles.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:49, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Ensure all online refs have either a publication date or an access date as a minimum.
  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:55, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

That's it on my first pass. It's on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 15:25, 5 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

Further

  • I've just noticed that our article on WPA calls it the World Pool-Billiard Association. If that's correct, shouldn't that be the name of the organisation used in the article? If not, we ought to think about moving the WPA article back to World Pool Association.
  • "Ten-Ball" still in the infobox.
  • "the Predator Group." any information on what they do, what they make? (just because it's redlinked and I've never heard of them...
  • I missed this first time round, what does "The tournament prize fund had "$100,000 added prize money"." mean, when the total is clearly shown as $132,000?"
  • " the ingle-elimination" s!
    • How did I miss that?

Otherwise I think we're nearly there. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 06:54, 7 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

Ok, I've made a few final tweaks but I think we're now at GA standard. Ideally some of those red links should be stubbed, but otherwise we're good to go, so I'm promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:25, 9 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
The redlinks are on my to do list. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 10:37, 9 September 2019 (UTC)Reply