Talk:2019 World Open (snooker)/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:17, 16 December 2019 (UTC)
Will review this article. MWright96 (talk) 13:17, 16 December 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking a look at this one, MWright96. It's not the longest in my arsenal, so let me know what needs a fix. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:54, 16 December 2019 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lede
editThe equals symbol at the end of the first sentence is not needed- "The event was the 2019 edition of the World Open, that was first held in 1982." - gramatically correct which was
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:10, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
- "and the third event held in China." - of the season or year?
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:10, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
- "having won the previous year's event," - maybe state it was the 2018 tournament?
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:10, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
- "scoring a 144 in the third round of his first round victory" - should the word in bold be changed to frame?
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:10, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
Prize fund
edit- The second and third sentences are not backed up by the World Snooker source and require another reference
- added Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:13, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
- A source will be required to confirm the prize for the tournament's highest break
- Removed, couldn't find one. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:13, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
Tournament format
edit- "This was the 37th World Open tournament," - The Snooker Scene reference attaced to this does not mention it wasthe 37th ediiton of the tournament. This will require a reference that explcitly states this.
- reworded, I couldn't find a specific cite Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:20, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
- "The defending champion, Mark Williams, declined to appear at the tournament." - Where there any reasons stated for Williams' absence?
- Not really. The closest we got was someone wishing him luck on twitter, and him replying that he wouldn't be playing. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:20, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
- The Guardian source does not mention Robertson was given a map to the qualifiers for the Northern Ireland Open. Please rectify this.
- Changed cites Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:20, 17 December 2019 (UTC)
Early rounds (round one—quarter-finals)
edit- "Binghams' century break in frame six was the 300th of his career." - this sentence is unsupported by the snooker.org source and will need another reference to verify it
- Removed - it's not true, it happened in the international championship - good shout.
- Also it should be "Bingham's" and not "Binghams'"
- irrelevant now. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:35, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- "led 2–1 before breaks of 100, 55 and 62 from Gilbert in the next three frames." - I feel there is an word that is missing from this sentence
- Added some words. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:35, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- "Un-Nooh won the next three frames with breaks of 77, 66 and 96 in just 37 minutes to reach the semi-finals." - The Sporting Life and World Snooker refs do not state that Un-Nooh won the final three frames in 37 minutes
- Add source Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:35, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- "Had he won the event, he was the last remaining player who could qualify for the Champion of Champions event ahead of Jimmy White." - this is not supported by the sportinglife reference. Please find a source that explicitly states this
- Source added. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:35, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- "The fourth and final semi-finalist was Kyren Wilson. Wilson, a two-time ranking event winner" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this
- reworded Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:35, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
Later rounds (semi-final—final)
edit- "The event's semi-finals were held on 2 November 2019. Both matches were played as best-of-11 frames; both finished at 6–5." - the World Snooker source does not explicily state these two sentences. How about use the snooker.org source instead?
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- How about reword the first sentence above to "The two semi-finals took place on 2 November."
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- "The first semi-final was played between Un-Nooh and Wilson. Wilson won" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this as with the final query raised in the sub-section prior
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- "the first three frames of the match, despite a highest break of 44." - better the match's opening three frames; Wilson's highest break during this time was a 44.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- "Un-Nooh won the next two frames, including a break of 72," - The World Snooker source says it was a 74 clearance not 72
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- "Wilson gained the first chance in the final frame" - This portion of text is too similiarly worded per WP:LIMITED and a tad informal. It will need to be changed accordingly.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- "allowing Un-Nooh to win frame and match." - to win the frame and the match.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- "The second semi-final was a rematch of the 2019 World Snooker Championship final between John Higgins and Judd Trump. Trump took the" - Same issue as the third point in the sub-section
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- "Higgins took the next two with two breaks of above 50." - a little better more than 50.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- The BBC Sport source in the third paragraph does not state that Trump defeated Un-Nooh 10-9 in the 2019 World Championship. The World Snooker Reference in the same paragraph does though so that will need addressing.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- "The victory put Trump level with Ding Junhui with the most ranking event titles." - Perhaps state which position Trump was with Ding in the all-time ranking tournament victories after this one?
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:31, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
Main draw
edit- How about mention in the prose above the results table that the players denoted in bold are the winners of their respective matches?
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:08, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
Main stage centuries
edit- World Snooker state there were 64 century breaks and not 62. Please correct this in the prose and by adding in the bullet points the missing centuries.
- fixed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:37, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
Qualifying stage centuries
edit- World Snooker has 32 century breaks in the qualifying stages rather than the 34 stated in the article. Please find another source to back up this claim or remove the two centuries that are affected if they cannot be verified
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:44, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
References
edit- References 1 and 8 are linked to the same page. Please avoid this
- Fixed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:05, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- Reference 2 is missing its publishing date by Sporting Life
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:05, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- References 15 and 24 are missing the authors who wrote the respective articles
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:05, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- Reference 17 is lacking the date it was published and the author who wrote it
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:05, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- Reference 18 is linked to the incorrect picture caption; it should be the second picture and not the first
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:05, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- The same reference is missing the date it was published
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:05, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
- I believe Reference 22 is unnecessary because the portion of text stating Un-Nooh had reached his second career final is already mentioned in reference 19
- removed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:05, 18 December 2019 (UTC)
Overall there are some issues concerning the grammar to the prose and to the verifiability of some of the content which does not have a reliable source attaced to it. Since many of these are likely to be quick fixes, I will put the review on hold until all of the fixes have been addressed accordingly. MWright96 (talk) 15:33, 16 December 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you for your review, MWright96 - sorry it took so long to finish my end - I think I've got it all now. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:32, 21 December 2019 (UTC)
- @Lee Vilenski: Am now promoting to GA class. Note I have made some changes to the article. MWright96 (talk) 06:22, 23 December 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you for your review, MWright96 - sorry it took so long to finish my end - I think I've got it all now. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:32, 21 December 2019 (UTC)