Talk:2020 Treviso Open/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by GhostRiver in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 18:49, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
I'll be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 18:49, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
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Infobox and lede
edit- Comma after "The event had a total prize pool of €38,000"
- Comma after "The men's event was won by Jayson Shaw"
- Switch the first two sentences of the second paragraph for better flow (e.g. defending champion eliminated → new winner)
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:13, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
Tournament format
edit- Why is the name of the hotel italicized here?
- Specify in this section that it's nine-ball pool, which is mentioned in the lede but not in the body
- Not a fan of the semi-colon after "double-elimination tournament", as the second half is not actually an independent clause.
- Move "7–5" to after "Marharyta Fefilava" rather than at the end of the sentence, for better clarity
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:13, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
Prize fund
edit- "both of the winners of the event" → "the winner of each event"; otherwise it could be read that there were two winners per event
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:13, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
Tournament summary
edit- Is it "losers round" or "loser's round"? Both are used at different points
- Comma after "Oliwia Zalewska"
- Remove comma after "completed two 7–6 victories"
- "defeated" used twice in the sentence beginning "Having defeated Bojana Sarac" and is used again in the next sentence. Should use a synonym to break up flow
- Per MOS:CAPTION, since it's a complete sentence, the caption should end with a period
- No comma needed after "Ouschan won the final"
- Hyphen to en dash in the last sentence
- all done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:24, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
Results
edit- Why is one a "competition" and the other is an "event"?
- fixed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:24, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
References
edit- Work needed in reference [2]
- Sometimes a publisher is given for epbf.com, sometimes not
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:27, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
General comments
edit- No stability concerns within the revision history
- One photo, relevant and properly licensed
- Per MOS:IMAGELOCATION, the photo used should probably be on the right side
- I was working on
It is often preferable to place images of people so that they "look" toward the text, but do not achieve this by reversing the image, which creates a false presentation
, which is why it's on the left, but I can't say I care either way. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:26, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
- I was working on
- Earwig score looks great at 2.9%
That's all I have! Ping me if you have any questions. — GhostRiver 19:01, 23 September 2021 (UTC)
- All done GhostRiver. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:31, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
- Looks good to me, thanks! — GhostRiver 13:42, 24 September 2021 (UTC)