Talk:25 Images of a Man's Passion
Latest comment: 9 years ago by 97198 in topic GA Review
 | 25 Images of a Man's Passion has been listed as one of the Language and literature good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. Review: February 11, 2015. (Reviewed version). |
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Reviewer: 97198 (talk · contribs) 01:55, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
Another interesting article on what sounds like an interesting work. I'll leave comments below as I review each section. 97198 (talk) 01:55, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- Lead
- The year of publication is given inside the parentheses with the French title—since it is an important piece of information, can I suggest adding "first published in 1918" to the end of the opening sentence instead?
- Cahnged to "25 Images of a Man's Passion, or The Passion of a Man is the first wordless novel by Flemish artist Frans Masereel (1889–1972), first published in 1918 under the French title 25 images de la passion d'un homme."
- Great. I've added italics to the French title.
- Cahnged to "25 Images of a Man's Passion, or The Passion of a Man is the first wordless novel by Flemish artist Frans Masereel (1889–1972), first published in 1918 under the French title 25 images de la passion d'un homme."
- "... was the first wordless novel by Flemish artist Frans Masereel"—should was be is, since the book still exists?
- Of course. Fixed. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- "the work is also laden with religious imagery"—can you find a less subjective word to replace laden?
- Changed to "filled"—I didn't realize "laden" was such a subjective word. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- To me, it sounds quite negative, like a burden; Google defines it as "heavily loaded or weighed down".
- Changed to "filled"—I didn't realize "laden" was such a subjective word. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- Background
- "and thus is the earliest example of the wordless novel genre"—is in this clause appears to refer to Masereel rather than the novel
- Changed to "which is thus". Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- Synopsis
- This is a major nitpick, but this section uses the American spelling of "industrialized" whereas the rest of the article uses the British spelling of "mediaeval"—I'm not sure which style is more appropriate for a Belgian topic but it should be consistent
- Actually, it's in Canadian English, to frustrate the greatest number of readers. Ive added a {{Use Canadian English}} to make it clearer. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- Ah, I must admit I'm not familiar with Canadian English. Thanks for clearing that up.
- Actually, it's in Canadian English, to frustrate the greatest number of readers. Ive added a {{Use Canadian English}} to make it clearer. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- "... and drinks and whores with his coworkers"—not sure about the use of the verb whores here; is there a word missing?
- Perhaps not the most common usage, but one meaning of the verb "whore" is "To engage the services of a prostitute." Off the top of my head I can't think of a phrasing to replace it that's not a mouthful. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- I've only ever heard the verb used in the context of prostituting oneself but hey, today I learnt something.
- Perhaps not the most common usage, but one meaning of the verb "whore" is "To engage the services of a prostitute." Off the top of my head I can't think of a phrasing to replace it that's not a mouthful. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- "He self-educates himself"—repetitive; maybe remove self-?
- Urk—that was dumb. Dropped "self-". Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- Style and analysis
- "The cover of the German edition had the main character"—depicted might be a better word than had here
- Subsitituted and changed to present tense. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- "Willet finds parallels"—should mention Willet's first name
- "the story arc of Masereel's the book"—stray the?
- Obliterated. Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- General
- Both images are in the US public domain
- All information is adequately sourced and all references are reliable sources
- Article history is stable
Overall, there is very little to fault with the article except for the very minor issues I've pointed out above. Once those are addressed I'll be happy to promote it to GA. 97198 (talk) 02:21, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- Oh, I'm really sorry to do this to you in the middle of a review, but I rearranged all the images, and added five. Could you give them a peak? Curly Turkey ¡gobble! 04:16, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
- No problem—all of the new images are fine. All of your changes look good (I've left a couple of responses above too) so I'm more than happy to go ahead and promote the article. Great work! 97198 (talk) 05:26, 11 February 2015 (UTC)