Talk:34th Battalion (New Zealand)/GA1
Latest comment: 7 years ago by Krishna Chaitanya Velaga in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 15:36, 23 January 2017 (UTC)
Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:36, 23 January 2017 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay, will comment within a couple of days. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:41, 6 February 2017 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox; all good
- Section 1.1;
- When was 8th Infantry Brigade Group raised?
- Have added.
- several years? from when and which "several years" is the context about?
- Rephrased. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- defence of the colony; which colony?
- Clarified that we are referring to Fiji. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- I find this entire sentence confusing, please rephrase
- How does it read now with the clarification? Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- contingent of reinforcement personnel -> contingent of reinforcements
- Done. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- date of arrival at Suva
- Have added. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- F. W. Voelcker; isn't the full name available?
- Not at this stage but there is one more source I will check. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- Found it and added. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- Not at this stage but there is one more source I will check. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- minimal training -> minimal military training
- Done. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- before shipping to Fiji -> before being shipped to Fiji
- Done. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- military basics -> basics of warfare and tactics
- Done. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- Towards the end of 1941,
andas the threat of hostilities- Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- By now it was up to full strength with the recent arrival of reinforcements in Fiji; did the reinforcements arrive from Fiji, so where was the battalion? or it means, that with the arrival of reinforcements, in Fiji, the battalion was full
- Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- Link Major General
- Done. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 8 February 2017 (UTC)
- war
farein the Pacific- Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- Link Guadalcanal
- Done. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- full name of R. J. Eyre?
- Have added. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- When was 8th Infantry Brigade Group raised?
- More later ... Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 15:14, 7 February 2017 (UTC)
- Thanks for the feedback thus far, Krishna, I have attended to or made comments in relation to these. Thanks. Zawed (talk) 06:37, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
- Section 1.2;
- advised the New Zealand Government that it was ready for combat duties; "advised" is a bit awkward, may be "informed" etc.
- Done. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)
- 6.25 am -> 6:25 am, per MOS:TIME
- Done. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)
- Reidy's full name?
- Have added an initial, no luck with finding his given name. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)
- advised the New Zealand Government that it was ready for combat duties; "advised" is a bit awkward, may be "informed" etc.
- Section 1.3; all good
- Section 2; all good
- Section 3; I prefer mentioning the full names
- Have done, except for Reidy as I wasn't able to find out his first name. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)
- Have done, except for Reidy as I wasn't able to find out his first name. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)
- All images are appropriately licensed
- 17.4% confidence, violation unlikely.
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:24, 10 February 2017 (UTC)
- @Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: thanks for the comments, have responded above. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 07:39, 12 February 2017 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 02:22, 17 February 2017 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: