Talk:44 Bulldog

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:55, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will start this review later today! --K. Peake 17:55, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• Remove the exact release date of the album and the mention of the record labels; merely add (2020) in brackets after the title instead
• "who's real names" → "whose real names"
• To avoid the first para being too short, move the opening sentence of the second para to being its last sentence
• ""44 Bulldog" was originally supposed to go" → "It was originally supposed to be released"
• "Pop Smoke's second mixtape" → "Pop Smoke's second mixtape,"
• Pipe hard drive to Hard disk drive
• The drill sentence should come before the lyrics one
• "The lyrics are about" → "The lyrics see"
• Remove "enigmatic" and "singed", as these words being used is too much detail for the lead
• Pipe synth to Synthesizer
• "music critics described the song" → "music critics described "44 Bulldog"" with the pipe
• "Pop Smoke's more darker tracks." → "Pop Smoke's darker tracks."
• Add info about the chart performance to the lead

Background

• "early in his career. The rapper got" → "early in his career, having acquired"
• Pipe snares to Snare drum
• Wikilink hi-hats
• Pipe kicks to Kick drum
• "was a lost record." → "was "the lost record"." per the source
• "to go on Meet the Woo 2," → "to be released on the mixtape,"
• Pipe hard drive to Hard disk drive
• "They later got all those things fixed," → "They later got all the complications fixed,"
• "no session for it." → "no session for the song."
• "They all tried to" → "All of them tried to" to avoid overusing "they" at the start of sentences
• mp3 → MP3, with the wikilink (sources don't always use correct stylization)
• "who's real names are" → "whose real names are"

Music and lyrics

• Remove speech mark at the end of the opening sentence
• Pipe synth to Synthesizer
• "commented the interpolates" → "The song interpolates" with the pipe, as interpolation is not a matter of opinion
• Move the part about Hannah Giorgis commenting to being after the connective in this sentence
• Pipe single to Single (music)
• Wikilink John Carpenter
• "saying it has" → "saying the song has"
• Introduce Aron A. as being from HotNewHipHop, plus cut down on the amount quoted directly from him per WP:QUOTEFARM
• "stated that Pop Smoke" → "stated that the rapper" to avoid overusage of his name

Release and reception

• Introduce Rob Harvilla as being of The Ringer
• "Los Angeles Times's August Brown" → "The Los Angeles Times' August Brown"
• "regarded it as one of Pop Smoke's" sharpest" → "regarded the song as Pop Smoke's "sharpest"
• Geographical order should be used for charts, so place Australia before France and use a comma for separation of the last two positions

Credits and personnel

• Good

Charts

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks decent at 36.3%
• Nice job with the archiving here and there is no issues with the ref layout!

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 19:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Thanks a lot for the comments Kyle Peake! The Ultimate Boss (talk) 21:25, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

• The Ultimate Boss Kudos to you for the quick response, but you still need to fix certain issues:

• Remove the referencing of the record labels in the opening sentence
• Change the ""44 Bulldog" was originally supposed to go" part accordingly (see earlier for this and other comments below)
• Change the "no session for it" part accordingly

After these are covered, this should be good to go! --K. Peake 21:56, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Shit. Fixed them. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 22:48, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now, nest job but remember to check everything is done before ticking off! --K. Peake 06:17, 22 March 2021 (UTC)