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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 17:55, 24 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi! Happy to review. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 17:55, 24 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Hi! Let me know the comments! Magentic Manifestations (talk) 18:33, 24 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Nice article. Here are my comments:

  • Lead:
  • joint venture with AirAsia Berhad holding 49% of the airline, Tata Sons holding 40.06% and Telestra Tradeplace having the remaining 10% in the airline Better rephrase this as "joint venture with AirAsia Berhad holding 49% stake in the airline, Tata Sons holding 40.06% and Telestra Tradeplace holding the remaining 10%." Please check that the meaning is the same. Y
  • What exactly is Telestra Tradeplace? Y
  • Air Asia India commenced operations on 12 June 2014 with Bangalore as its primary hub. Would look better in first para. Y
  • The company marked Tata's return to aviation industry after 60 years, having ceded Air India in 1946. Would look better in second para. Y
Sainsf, done!Magentic Manifestations (talk) 17:02, 28 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Thanks, Magentic Manifestations. Now, continuing with the rest of the article:

  • History:
  • foreign direct investment of up to 49% "in airlines"? Y
  • with Tata sons "S"ons Y
  • ₹1.25 (1.9¢ US)/available seat kilometer "/" would look better as "per". "Kilometre" as per BE. Y
  • The introduction of AirAsia was expected to By whom? Y
  • an amount of US$50 million Could be converted to INR. (stated originally in US$, so did not convert)
  • rent/lease aircraft The slash could be better replaced by "or". Y
  • AirAsia India was established on 28 March 2013. AirAsia is the first foreign airline to set up a subsidiary in India. Can be combined. Y
  • as its secondary hub Remove "as". Y
  • after IndiGo and SpiceJet with "SpiceJet, with" Y
  • Corporate affairs:
  • founder of AirAsia group announced "group, announced" Y
  • airline, however the latter refused "airline; however, Tata refused" Y
  • Somewhere you say "chairman", elsewhere "Chairman". Y
  • chief adviser "advisor" (BE) Y
  • Destinations:
  • If each entry has a source then what is ref. 29 for?(think, no harm in additional reference from airline website.)
  • Fleet:
  • Link Airbus.
  • import 10 A320-200 aircraft Would be better to say "ten" here. Y
  • AirAsia India on 21 March 2015 "On 21 March 2015, AirAsia India" Y
  • and the is registered as VT-APJ Error? Y
  • Honor --> Honour (BE). Y
  • Sources:

I think that should be it. These addressed, I would be happy to promote this. Cheers! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 04:26, 30 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Sainsf, done!Magentic Manifestations (talk) 07:35, 30 April 2016 (UTC)Reply
Very well, promoted. Cheers! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 07:36, 30 April 2016 (UTC)Reply