Talk:A (Ayumi Hamasaki EP)/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 21:25, 29 November 2016 (UTC)

• Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 21:25, 29 November 2016 (UTC)

Comments

• Link "Avex Trax" in the lead.
• Please spell out the number 10 in the phrase "10 different editions".
• I would recommend just saying a "success" rather than a "huge success". The part "huge success" sounds rather like a weasel phrase.
• You repeat the following phrase "best selling single" in close proximity in the lead. Please revise to either add variety or combine the two ideas together.
• Add "a" before "majority of the sound".
• I am not sure what you mean by "influenced throughout". Are you talking about the influences for the album or the songs on the album itself? If you are talking about the songs on the album itself, I would recommend just saying "sound throughout the".
• References 4 and 5 are dead, so please update this.
• Spell out the number 10 in the "Release" section
• The compact disc colors should not be capitalized, unless they are official names for the releases.
• What do you mean by "This version was made of real gold"? What part of the version was made of real gold? The CD itself? Please clarify.
• In the first sentence of the "Promotion and live performances" section, you reference A as a single. I know that you draw attention to how A can be classified as multiple things (an EP, a single, an album) and I greatly appreciate that, but I just want to double-check with you that this is the correct wording here (referencing A as a single as opposed to an EP). You mention it as an EP later in the same section, so this added to my confusion here.

@CaliforniaDreamsFan: Great job with the article! My comments are relatively minor and nitpicky. Once my review is addressed, I will pass this. Let me know if you have any questions about my review. Aoba47 (talk) 02:06, 30 November 2016 (UTC)

• • @Aoba47: All done! Thank you CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 04:13, 3 December 2016 (UTC)
    • {{ping|CaliforniaDreamsFan} Awesome work on this! ✓ Pass