Talk:A (For 100 Cars)

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Bilorv in topic GA Review

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by BorgQueen (talk16:28, 1 June 2023 (UTC)Reply

Moved to mainspace by Schminnte (talk). Self-nominated at 09:54, 27 May 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/A (For 100 Cars); consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.Reply

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
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QPQ: Done.
Overall:   @Schminnte: Good article. Onegreatjoke (talk) 00:50, 28 May 2023 (UTC)Reply

Sound sample?

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Might someone be able to add a 30-second sound sample? That would be within the FUC. I am really dying to know what this piece actually sounds like, and I'm sure I'm not alone. Daniel Case (talk) 02:09, 10 June 2023 (UTC)Reply

@Daniel Case: wonder if this will do. It's an unofficial recording; best I could find due to the limited performances. YouTube recording (roughly 35 seconds of actual footage) Schminnte (talk contribs) 08:48, 10 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
If you could strip the sound layer out, this would probably work. Daniel Case (talk) 17:45, 10 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
I'll see what I can do Schminnte (talk contribs) 18:26, 10 June 2023 (UTC)Reply
Unfortunately I can't do anything. It's against YouTube's ToS to download videos (and by extension, get an audio file) so I would be very hesitant. Schminnte (talk contribs) 16:44, 15 June 2023 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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Reviewer: Bilorv (talk · contribs) 18:06, 24 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

I'll take this one. — Bilorv (talk) 18:06, 24 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Thanks. I'll preemptively say that for criterion 3a, I have mined every source that I can find on this topic. So although it appears as a short article, I consider it to be sufficiently broad. Schminnte (talk contribs) 19:13, 24 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Broadness

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As you say, the article is on the short side for GA in both prose and reference list. I think there are two things missing for broadness (3(a)):

  1. Contextualisation of the piece as part of Ikeda's A project. There's A and A [continuum] and others (FactMag 1, FactMag 2, Ikeda's website).
  2. The 15-minute film accompanying the performance (Autoweek).

I also found another review (note that Shana Nys Dambrot appears to be an established, reputable critic).

I'd like to see at least a couple more paragraphs on these topics.

Referencing

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I'm satisfied with the reliability of sources. I've spotchecked Tiny Mix Tapes, Create Digital Music, MusicRadar, Lee (2018) and The New York Times. My only issues are with the last:

  • "To better emit the sounds created by Takahashi's synthesisers, some drivers opted to open their car's doors" – The source just says that some doors were open, without explaining why.
  • I'd like to see the headlights and horns mentioned under "Performance": Mr. Ikeda's composition wasn't limited to the stereo systems; it also took advantage of the cars' headlights, horns and roaring engines.

Copyedits

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  • A (musical note) doesn't appear to be linked anywhere, surprisingly: it could be in the first occurrence in the lead and body.
  • "The idea behind A [For 100 Cars] springs from Ikeda's curiosity with the various frequencies associated to the note A." – This can be made more concise e.g. "Ikeda was curious about the various frequencies associated to the note A."
  • Concert pitch should probably be linked somewhere in "Composition", not "Music" (and 9 words is a bit too many to link over; you could use the phrase "concert pitch" itself).
  • "A been associated with many different frequencies" – this should be "A has been ..." and probably also "concert A" (as it still is associated with many different frequencies,   Hz).
  • "sine wave drone" makes a sea of blue so could be rephrased to keep both of these links.
  • "A used by ..." reads a little bit oddly. I think you could drop the "A" as clear from previous context, or change to "the A used by ..."
  • "from 376.3 – 506.9 Hz" – I think this should be "from ... to ..."
  • I think a space is needed before "dB" and decibel could be linked.
  • "put the performance on their list of the best performances" – Reword to avoid multiple uses of "performance" within a sentence.

I'm happy with the free images used. I won't require it for GA but, rather than a potentially non-free extract from the performance, I'd like to see a "multiple audio" box of a note A playing on an electronic piano for 5 seconds at different frequencies (maybe even the 6 listed).

This is formally   on hold for 7 days but if progress is still being made there can be some leeway with this. — Bilorv (talk) 22:08, 24 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Copyedits and referencing issues should now be resolved; I will wait until I can access a computer to add the references you linked above since I don't trust the mobile editor to not crash. All the best, Schminnte (talk contribs) 08:59, 25 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Now good on everything but Ikeda's broader A project. — Bilorv (talk) 15:52, 29 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
@Bilorv, hopefully that should be enough context now. The article now stands at almost 1000 words. Are we good to go now? Schminnte (talk contribs) 21:24, 29 August 2023 (UTC)Reply
Yep, I'm happy with the additions. This is a   pass for GA. — Bilorv (talk) 21:53, 29 August 2023 (UTC)Reply