Talk:A Gift of Magic/GA1

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Fearstreetsaga in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Barkeep49 (talk · contribs) 15:08, 29 March 2019 (UTC)Reply

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  • I don't quite understand the dancing injury subplot - how does this tie into the larger story of ESP?
I haven't read it so I don't understand how important it really is to a plot summary but it struck me as off while reading the article. Based on what you've written here would suggest paring it back. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
I've gone ahead and condensed that part of the plot summary. Fearstreetsaga (talk) 01:23, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Reply
  Done
  • I would either move Note 1 to be after the citation supporting the fact in the next sentence or add its own citation for the sentence and keep the note where it is (this works better of the two, imo)
Yeah for adding a citation for the note. I was actually talking about the sentence which starts "While Duncan was studying..." Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
My mistake. I went ahead and made the change. Fearstreetsaga (talk) 01:23, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • I never quite know what to do with audiobooks myself but having the release of the audiobook in publication makes sense but having the review in reception makes sense and those two things should be together. So not necessarily a suggestion here just a note.
    • Yeah, any of those arrangements make sense to me. I put the audiobook review in the publication history section because I've seen a couple of featured articles do it that way and it seemed reasonable to me. Fearstreetsaga (talk) 00:52, 2 April 2019 (UTC)Reply
Good enough for me. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
  • What evidence is there that Tor.com is a reliable source for analysis/criticism?
I still have questions but that feels good enough that I wouldn't want to hold up a GA over it. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
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@Fearstreetsaga: See review above. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 21:03, 1 April 2019 (UTC)Reply
@Barkeep49: Thanks for taking a look at the article. Fearstreetsaga (talk) 00:52, 2 April 2019 (UTC)Reply