Talk:A Touch of Brimstone/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Daß Wölf (talk · contribs) 10:34, 27 June 2022 (UTC)

Hello, I'll be starting the review soon :) Daß Wölf 10:34, 27 June 2022 (UTC)

Sorry for taking this much time. Excellent work on the article, especially finding sources for the Reception and influences section! There are only a few issues remaining, mostly regarding the prose. Daß Wölf 00:06, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

@BennyOnTheLoose: Sorry, just realised I forgot to ping you! Daß Wölf 10:33, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

First round

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• The Diana Rigg photo should have an |alt= tag for screen readers. See WP:ALT for advice on how to write it.

• Added. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:39, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

• Consider linking the Hellfire Club in the lead. While the sentence talks about the fictional club, it seems it was meant (in-universe) to be the successor of the historical ones, so linking seems appropriate to me.

• There's a link at the end of the lead, which I think in this case is better than linking at first instance, but happy to amend. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:39, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

• Sorry, I can't seem to find it. Can you quote the sentence it's in? Daß Wölf 10:03, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

•  Self-trout I was looking at the plot section rather than the lead. Amended the lead. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:49, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

• Shouldn't "Lumiere pictures" be in Title Case?

• Yes, amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:39, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

• "and withe the magnificent OTT [over the top] grandeur of Wyngarde" -- withe → with?

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:39, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

• "The episode contained visual reference to sado-masochistic pornography, and featured Rigg wearing a kinky "Queen of Sin" costume (which she designed herself)." -- suggest: "costume, which she designed herself", as the clause is repeated verbatim with the parentheses below.

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:39, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

• Likewise, "Hellfire Club member Jason Wyngarde's name and likeness is based on Peter Wyngarde (who was later known for the role of Jason King)." can be reworded without the parentheses. The sentence is relatively short and works fine without them.

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:39, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

• The Phelim O'Neill quote needs a direct citation (per WP:V). Daß Wölf 00:06, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

• Added. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:39, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

• There's one more quote missing a direct reference, at "Media historian James Chapman wrote of the episode...". Daß Wölf 10:03, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

• Added citation. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:49, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking on the review and for your constructive suggestions, Daß Wölf. Let me know about anything else that needs to be done. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk)

@BennyOnTheLoose: You're welcome and thanks for making the changes I suggested. I've added only two new comments above; that's all I can think of. Daß Wölf 10:03, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

@Daß Wölf: Thanks again. Hopefully I've dealt with those. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:49, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for the edit, I'm ✓ Passing the nomination. Thank you once again for working on this article! Daß Wölf 11:16, 30 June 2022 (UTC)