Talk:Aachen Town Hall

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Browssobs in topic Re-writing

Re-writing

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Overall, the article is informative but written in essay style. Should be re-written with keeping most of the information.--Browssobs (talk) 01:20, 10 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

@Browssobs: Thank you for taking care of this article. However, I'd like to ask you why exactly you removed this information. Hoping for your obliging reply,--Hildeoc (talk) 20:21, 17 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

Hi,Hildeoc I was out of Wikipedia for quite a while. I don't remember removing anything important - just re-editing actually because I found this article in the list of "Articles to be re-written" for grammar, style and other reasons and I found some sentences of non-encyclopedic style, so I re-wrote them and added more citations. If you wish to be more specific, could you, please, show me the changes that looked not good to you? If you are the creator of the page, I'm ready to discuss my updates for the benefit of Wikipedia. However, as I said, the article needs to be re-written as it has a tag requirement on it.--Browssobs (talk) 20:49, 11 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

As I already said, I'm referring to the information removed by this edit of yours.--Hildeoc (talk) 20:55, 11 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

ok, it looks like I found it: "Aachen’s city hall survived World War I without sustaining damage, but during civil unrest that arose in the course of a separatists’ movement whose goal was the creation of an independent Rhenish Republic, City Hall was stormed by a group of separatists who caused serious damage both to its interior and exterior. Parts of the façade, such as adorning statues and both clocks, were broken, as were all window panes on the first floor on the Market side. Additionally, several rooms inside the building were ransacked, and many of the famed frescoes within were heavily damaged by gunfire. The furniture (especially that within the mayoral office and Coronation Hall) were damaged as they were used as projectiles. In the Emperor Hall, an undetonated bomb was discovered.<ref>Will Hermann:. Stadt in Ketten, S. 250-269 , Aach"

I removed it for two reasons: 1) This an encyclopedia article and it has excessive information about all pieces of furniture damaged - I did a summary that it was damaged. \ 2. The style of the text was like "an essay", especially this: "Parts of the façade, such as adorning statues and both clocks, were broken, as were all window panes on the first floor on the Market side. Additionally, several rooms inside the building were ransacked, and many of the famed frescoes within were heavily damaged by gunfire. The furniture (especially that within the mayoral office and Coronation Hall) were damaged as they were used as projectiles." This part tells us about the damage and the period of time and who caused the damage, so all the important for encyclopedia aspects are still there. Aachen’s city hall survived World War I without sustaining damage, but during the civil unrest in the Rhenish Republic period, the City Hall was stormed by a group of separatists who caused serious damage both to its interior and exterior If you really wish to leave all the details about furniture parts, I believe it should be more concise and written in encyclopedic style. Let me know if you still have any questions--Browssobs (talk) 21:00, 11 December 2019 (UTC) And this is the major reason: This article may need to be rewritten to comply with Wikipedia's quality standards, as it is written in a poor (German!) style. You can help. The discussion page may contain suggestions. (June 2016)Reply

For now, it doesn't look to comply--Browssobs (talk) 21:01, 11 December 2019 (UTC)Reply