Talk:Aagadu/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:26, 3 January 2016 (UTC)

I'll finish this one soon JAGUAR  15:26, 3 January 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "who is transferred to a village named Bukkapatnam as its circle inspector of police" - what is a circle inspector? Should it be police inspector?

Circle inspector is a police rank in India. I've wikilinked it.

• "Few song sequences were filmed in Ladakh, Switzerland and Ooty apart from Hyderabad and Bellary" - some

Done Rephrased.

• "However, the fact that Mallikharjun was a gay" - remove 'a'

Done Removed.

• "He is murdered by poisoning the food he ate" - by eating poisoned food

Done Rephrased.

• "by paying respect to Srihari whose succumbed to liver cancer on 9 October 2013" - who

Done Rephrased.

• " The makers preferred Hyderabad to Jammu & Kashmir and Rajastha" - to Jammu, Kashmir and Rajastha?

Jammu and Kashmir are not separate, they are one. Thus, i wrote The makers preferred Hyderabad to Jammu and Kashmir and Rajasthan for the remaining portions...

• "The song sequence and a fight were filmed in 23 days" - might sound better as Both the song and fight sequences were filmed in 23 days

Done Rephrased.

• "The manager lost his voice and the others developed severe headache" - headaches

Done Rephrased.

• "S. Thaman composed the film's music which marked his 50th film as a music director" - comma needed in between "music" and "which"

Done Added.

• "Aagadu was released in 100 screens across countries like Australia, United Kingdom, Switzerland, United Arab Emirates, etc. and the premieres" - sentence needs to split in between "etc" and "the". So it reads like etc. The premieres

Done Rephrased.

On hold

Very comprehensive article! Once all of the minor issues are addressed then this should be good to go. I'm surprised that this flopped in the box office, but it seemed to do well in the United States. JAGUAR  22:38, 3 January 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the review Jaguar. I've addressed your comments and i hope the article meets the GA criteria now. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 03:47, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them! This one is good to go. As usual, congratulations on promoting another Telugu film! JAGUAR  12:59, 4 January 2016 (UTC)