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Talk:Action of 28 January 1945/GA1

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Latest comment: 13 years ago by Anotherclown in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk) 03:28, 14 December 2010 (UTC)Reply

Progression

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  • Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
  • Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

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  • Citations: - the citation check tool reveals no errors (no action required)
  • Disambiguations: none found - [3] (no action required)
  • Linkrot: Ext links all work - [4] (no action required)
  • Alt text: Images lack alt text (although this is not a requirement for GA anyway so its up to you if you want to add it or not) - [5] (no action required)

Criteria

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  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
    • You might considered putting something in the Lead to indicate that the action occurred during the Second World War;
      • Done
    • The first paragraph of the Background section is a little repetitive (use of January three times, and again in the first sentence of the second paragraph) - maybe reword a little?;
      • Done
    • I think the grammer in this sentence is a little off: "Upon sighting the German destroyers the British cruisers fired star shell and turned to the south on a course parallel to the German ships." Specifically was only one star shell fired or were there multiple? IMO it should be reworded to either "fired a star shell" or "fired star shells"; and
      • Fixed. 'Star shell' is normally used in cases where multiple shells were fired (from memory), but this is probably needlessly technical/jargon as 'shells' works well
    • The battle section has quite a number of stubby paragraphs. IMO these could be merged into 3 paragraphs which might make the prose flow a bit better. Specifically I would link the first and second paras and the third and fourth.
      • Done
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned):   b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):   c (non-free images have fair use rationales):   d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain':  
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