Talk:Action of 3 February 1812

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Action of 3 February 1812/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

GA review of this version:
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GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   • Background, P1, S1: Anything more specific than …for some years…?

   Changed to initially.

   • Battle, P1, S2: the comma-separated list of ships beginning with which included the frigate Améthyste… gets confused by the parenthetical statement about Améthyste's rename, also separated with commas. Can this be reworded to avoid the awkward phrasing?

   Think I've sorted it, but check.

   • Battle, P3, S7: the last clause of the sentence seems like it should be a sentence of its own (or separated by a semicolon, at the least).

   Not sure wexactly what you are referring to, can you give me a quote?

   • Sorry about not being more clear, but re-reading the sentence (the last one in that paragraph), it reads fine to me now, so never mind :) — Bellhalla (talk) 22:15, 14 May 2009 (UTC)

   • Aftermath, P1, S3: is there a were missing between jury masts and fitted

   Not necessarily, but I've added one to avoid confusion.

   • Aftermath, P2, S2: I'm not sure I understand the again in American privateers again threatened British… I know there were Americans in Heureuse Réunion's crew, but there hasn't been any other discussion of Americans or American privateers before this…(?)

   Again refers to the recurrence of the threat, not the reappearance of the Americans. Changed

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   • I delinked the second and third instances of William James (naval historian) from the book references, to avoid the overlinking

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

A few prose issues keep this from passing on first read. I'm sure you'll be able to address all of these within the seven-day hold period. — Bellhalla (talk) 18:41, 14 May 2009 (UTC)

I think I've make all of the changes, except one that I wasn't clear on. Thanks for the review.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:55, 14 May 2009 (UTC)

All looks good! Good job. — Bellhalla (talk) 22:15, 14 May 2009 (UTC)