Talk:Adams River (British Columbia)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 20:33, 12 April 2011 (UTC)

• The source of the river is Monashee Range? I don't know a lot about rivers, but I know the source of a river is usually not a mountain, unless water was flowing out of it.

• I've added a bit of info to that sentence, but I would disagree about river sources. Headwaters are predominantly in mountainous areas. While they don't flow "out" of specific mountains, the headwater streams are formed by rivulets that flow down mountain slopes and out of glaciers.

• "Its flow drops by up 5 metres" - remove up

  Done

• "The abundance of the salmon run made the river an important food source for First Nations people in the region." - Not referenced

  Done

• "first major industrial operation in the B.C. Interior." - I would not abbreviate British Columbia, since it is not abbreviated in the rest of the article, and the "B.C. Interior" is not the official name, rather, the "British Columbia Interior".

  Done

• "When sufficient logs had been collected above the dam, the gates were opened and the resulting flood carried the logs to Shuswap Lake. This proved to be very destructive to the salmon run." - How did this affect the salmon run, did they like get killed or injured from the logs?

  Done

• "The flumes were dismantled after the areas became logged out." - Not referenced

  Done

• "Although logging continues in the region, the Adams is no longer used for log transport." - Not referenced

  Done

• Why is the "Fauna" section empty?

• I've chaging the heading levels - this should be clearer now (section not empty - contents are "sockeye salmon", "dominant runs", and "other fauna"

• "2010 was the last dominant run." - Reword to "2010 was the most recent dominant run", since it sounds like you are implying that there won't be anymore "dominant runs".

  Done

• "Human visitors to Roderick Haig-Brown Provincial Park were estimated at 160,000 in 2010." - This sounds like it belongs somewhere else, considering you were talking about sockeye in that entire section until that sentence.

• Moved to "Protected areas" subsection.

• How can you have an "Other fauna" section if the "Fauna" section is empty?

• see note above

• "which provides trails and platforms for salmon viewing. Roderick Haig-Brown was a Canadian conservationist and writer and a member of the International Pacific Salmon Fisheries Commission." - Not referenced

• Done

• "Roderick Haig-Brown was a Canadian conservationist and writer and a member of the International Pacific Salmon Fisheries Commission." - Reword to avoid overusing the word "and"; typically a sentence should not use the word "and" more than once, since it is like saying "and this and that and this".

• Done

• References should not have words in all capital letter.

  Done

Since you have done most of what I requested, I will be passing this article. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 19:40, 17 April 2011 (UTC)