Talk:Addled Parliament/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Tenpop421 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: StoryKai (talk · contribs) 02:37, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
Hi, I will examine the quality of this article within one week.StoryKai (talk) 02:37, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for your interest in the article! I hope this goes successfully. Tenpop421 (talk) 14:35, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
@Tenpop421:This is good work. I don't have too much to criticize. However…
- Moir is first mentioned in the sentence, "By the end of May, as Moir put it…" Since this is the first mention of him, you should give his full name and state who he is.
- You should delete the three red links for Linda Levy Peck, Thomas L. Moir, and Maija Jansson, since notability for them hasn't been proven.
- According to Wikipedia:Further reading, "Further reading is primarily intended for publications that were not used by editors to build the current article content". Therefore, the books of Moir and Clucas, which were cited extensively, shouldn't be on the further reading list.
Also… --"the Salisbury was dead"=Delete "the".
--"suspecting he had had undermined"=Delete "had".
--"been the root of the king's failiure"=Spell the last word as "failure".
--"those a constitutional nature"=Insert "of" between "those" and "a".StoryKai (talk) 16:11, 1 June 2020 (UTC)
- Suggested changes all made. Tenpop421 (talk) 16:42, 1 June 2020 (UTC)