Talk:Adrian Crowley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 08:28, 27 March 2010 (UTC) OK, all in all, I'm satisfied this meets the criteria. There are no glaring issues with it, all the sources appear to be reliable and it's well written. I am slightly curious as to how he's Irish if he was born in Malta- is it how he identifies himself? If so, that should be stated and sourced in the article. There are a few other minor points with the lead- MOS:BIO says place of birth should not be in the lead sentence. I can see a good argument for putting it in the lead section, though, so perhaps you could move it around a little bit? Also, the lead does seem to be serving more as an introduction than a summary so it could perhaps use a little expansion and you should make sure that everything mentioned in the lead is covered in the body. It shouldn't take too long to fix that and I'll pass it when it's done! HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 08:28, 27 March 2010 (UTC)

What's it like now? --candle•wicke 02:10, 29 March 2010 (UTC)

Nicely done. I'm happy with that! HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 21:03, 29 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks. --candle•wicke 23:47, 6 April 2010 (UTC)